It's you once again. Right back here in my life. The one who caused me heartbreak. The one who made me cry I Thought that I was over you made up my mind. Never to fall for the words you might say but somehow. You stole my heart away like a thief in the night. Why do I feel such a need to be held, touched , kissed by you so passionately. It seems I let my guard down just so you could get closer to me and though it's hard to explain I've got a dependency.
Are you aware of what you've done to me. How you could love me so sweetly and make me so weak. Unleashing the passion I had pent up inside. Releasing my soul from my body to reach an unattainable high. Why is it so hard in this situation I can't avoid Will my final decision prove right or wrong. I can't imagine living my life without you hear with me. Yet if we were to stay together I'm not quite sure where that would lead.
It's so hard living without you boo.
Sweet baby I got a dependency. Feel like I'm drifting on a melody.
2007-05-29 01:00:41 · 6 answers · asked by Sol is Real 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
U don't even know me and you just describe my relationship too a T.... I can relate 2 every single line of this poem, it rings so true and close 2 my heart. You put in words what I could never express but I Feel it everyday.
It is a battle raging inside myself 2 let go of a man I KNOW is not good for me yet, I have a sweet dependency.
The poem was excellent!!! rating a triple star!
2007-05-29 02:03:11 · answer #1 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, i think this poem is highly rhetorical and emotive.
The poet is writing his personal feelings of love and lust. The poet is dependent on a lost love and yet scared of commitment.
It is written in a free verse narrative style. The use of the 1st person reveals personal emotions, the 'you' shows a direct address to 'boo' while 'we' is inclusive ie involving the poet and boo.
I would rate it 5/10
2007-05-29 02:51:09 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Tamara, it's passionately melancholic because you "can't imagine living my life without you hear with me." This betrays the initial loveless accusation that he indeed is guilty as the "one who caused me heartbreak."
nice sarcastic poem rendered appropriately in prosaic style.
2007-05-29 02:50:46 · answer #3 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its very engaging in the sense that I immediately personalized the poem to my life experiences. I think that is what may poets want-for people to internalize and make it their own....or maybe that's just what I want as a writer... : ) Excellent!!
2007-05-29 01:48:47 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting. Gave me some ideas about the ways in which a drug has something more to offer to someone than a relationship. I want to write something about a drug being a person. No difference. Person = drug. Interesting. Hmmm...
2007-05-29 01:14:03 · answer #5 · answered by leesa 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the relentlessness of the guard being let down to let him/her get closer. The hardness of it all, the dependecy, drags on.
enjoyed
2007-05-29 01:22:41 · answer #6 · answered by notfaxing 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋