Say hello to 22-year-old model, Nicole. She's very new to modeling. She enjoys taking pictures and see the artistic outcome. She has done everything including classy, rough, sexy, and lingerie. She paticularly likes working with cars; classic cars, exotic, lowriders, muscle, and even street bikes. Her favorite movie is "Cruel Intentions," directed by Roger Kumble. She listens to rap music such as Ying Yang Twins, Lil' John, and Ludacris.
2007-05-25 02:16:45 · 9 answers · asked by mbw m 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
You should put all the things that go together first.
Say hello to 22-year old model, Nicole. A newcomer to modelling, she has modelled everything from the classy to sexy lingerie. She enjoys photography and likes tinkering with all kinds of cars as well as street bikes. Her favorite movie is Roger Krumble's "Cruel Intentions". She also likes listening to rap artists namely Ying and Yang twins, Lil'John and Ludacris.
2007-05-25 05:40:36 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
It sounds terrible! You can't make heads or tails of it. Some of your sentences are ambigious. classy what? sexy what? clothes?
The only right & professional suggestion is from answerer Joannah. This is a caption for a magazine right? I'd go with her if I were you.
2007-05-25 12:44:18 · answer #2 · answered by ria81 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Seeing, particularly
Also, do you mean she likes being photographed? "She enjoys taking pictures" means she likes being the photographer, but since she's a model, I'm a bit confused. If she likes taking pictures, maybe you should say, "Besides modeling, she likes taking pictures".
PS: Cruel Intentions--great movie! and awesome car!
Edited to add: Does she like "tinkering" with cars? I assumed she liked being photographed with cars. I guess I'm underestimating young Nicole, no wonder I got so many thumbs-down. Joannah's answer is very good IF that's what you meant.
2007-05-25 09:30:36 · answer #3 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 0⤊ 4⤋
She enjoys taking pictures and SEEING the the artistic outcome.
Otherwise it sounds ok.
2007-05-25 09:23:36 · answer #4 · answered by Nancy 2 · 0⤊ 4⤋
The second sentence change "see" to "seeing".
The third sentence: Do you mean "She has done every type of modeling, including..."?
The rest is okay.
2007-05-25 09:29:33 · answer #5 · answered by CGordo 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋
"seeing the outcome" and "exotics" are the only grammatical changes I'd make. Otherwise is great.
2007-05-25 09:22:59 · answer #6 · answered by Snowflake 5 · 0⤊ 4⤋
seeing, and particularly. Ever hear of spell-grammar check?
2007-05-25 09:20:37 · answer #7 · answered by James 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋
None. It's perfect for me!
2007-05-25 09:23:56 · answer #8 · answered by $up3rM@n 3 · 0⤊ 4⤋
Its realy good to me there is no mistakes
2007-05-25 09:19:26 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 4⤋