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Question

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certain worth visiting. If you have time it is advisable to take excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) is video is wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, Swimming, Flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event Oceanside. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

Answer 1

First sentence, lose the comma between long and already.
Second sentence, certain should be certainly.
Third sentence, add a comma between time and it, then lose the comma between towns and like.
Fifth sentence does not make sense.
Sixth sentence, add a comma after in fact.
Seventh sentence, do not capitalize swimming or flirting, and add a comma after flirting. Do not capitalize oceanside.
Okay.

Answer 2

Watching all of these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certainly worth visiting. If you have time you should take a trip to some of the small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) are the wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, swimming, flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event Oceanside. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

Answer 3

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certainly worth visiting. If you have time it is advisable to take an excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) its video wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, Swimming, Flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event Oceanside. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

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