can anyone grammar check this for me?

Question

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certain worth visiting. If you have time it is advisable to take excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) is video is wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, Swimming, Flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event Oceanside. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

Answer 1

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certainLY worth visiting. If you have time it is advisable to take excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) is video "is" (DELETE THIS SECOND IS)wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking(ID CHANGE THAT TO TAKING, OR CHANGE THE SENTENCE COMPLETELY). Sunning (MAYBE SUN BATHING NO SUCH WORD AS SUNNING), Swimming, Flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event ON THE Oceanside. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world "famous" (COULD CHANGE TO RENOWNED FOR THEIR BEAUTY, ETC). Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

Answer 2

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance??? has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certainLY worth visiting. If you have time, it is advisable to take excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil. The biggest unifying ??? feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, Swimming, Flirting or just plain relaxing is a daily event. There is a beach that caters to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

Answer 3

Watching all these gorgeous bodies passing by all day long, already gives you the feeling you have arrived in Heaven. Even though tolerance has grown over the past years, the numerous villages and towns that surround Rio de Janeiro are certainly worth visiting. If you have time, it is advisable to take excursions to small colonial towns, like Parachior Buzios and The Saint Tropez of Brazil.
The biggest unifying feature for Cariocas (as Rio’s residents are known) is video is wide sandy beaches. In fact a 60-mile stretch of hedonistic pleasure is yours for the asking. Sunning, swimming, flirting or just relaxing is a daily event at Oceanside. There are beaches that cater to everyone. Copacabana and Ipanema are just two that are world famous. Some of the others such as Praia do Diablo (Devil’s Beach) or the far-flung grumari offer solitude and specialized activities.

I made some corrections for you on the grammar and spelling--I am not sure what this is for but if you were a student of mine I would bust you on lack of specifics and spotty content. You might want to flesh this out a bit more!

Answer 4

After Rio de Janeiro you have "certain" ... should read "certainly". "Residents" should have an apostrophe after the last "s" to qualify it as a posession. "... is video is wide" -- confusing. Maybe a typo?? Keep the capital letters off the verbs after "Sunning". Oceanside should begin with a lower case "o".

"...Ipanema are just two ... " needs rephrasing. Maybe reword the combined sentences to read. "There is a beach that caters to everyone including the two made world-famous by song, Copacabana and Ipanema" (something along those lines). The rest of it is just fine.

So, how come you got to go there while the rest of us just came here to Y!A.?? Come on. Tell us.