CRY WITHIN.
HURT EXTEND.
LOVE IS SHORT.
HATE IS STRONG.
LUST IS FAKE.
FEELINGS ARE HURT.
PASSION IS LOST.
KISS IS REAL.
TALKS ARE BLEAK.
LOOKS CAN KILL.
EMBRACE IS LOST.
NEED IS GONE.
WANT IS REAL.
TOUCH IS COLD.
HEAT IS WARM.
HEART IS TORN.
LAUGHS ARE SILENT.
SMILE WILL FADE.
PAIN IS LONG.
IT'S NOT THE SAME.
SLEEP IS DEATH.
LIFE IS HARD.
DREAMS ARE COLD.
HEART IS CHARRED.
2007-05-23 12:31:07 · 6 answers · asked by redina_lawson 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Is a diamond in the rough, very strong sentiments and feelings. the sentences need to be longer to really get accross your feelings and people can really identify with what your are trying to say. As a poem writer myself I can see that you have lots of potencial and don't be afraid to expose your feelings. you can also read some other poems and then you can decide the structure that you want to use. do some research if you really want to get better. good luck.
2007-05-23 12:42:12 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry but it's not doing it for me. Seems kind of like something a young kid would write, no real depth of feeling.
Keep at it you will get better.
2007-05-23 19:35:52 · answer #2 · answered by Just a friend. 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a wonderful job keep doing
2007-05-23 19:47:51 · answer #3 · answered by sarj 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Go to Poetry.com and send it to them.
2007-05-23 19:43:05 · answer #4 · answered by rose 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not so much
2007-05-23 19:35:42 · answer #5 · answered by John H 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
not that good
2007-05-23 19:41:21 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋