A Poem of Encouragement?

Question

Around him shone an iridescence
Bombs dropped-he knew he had to stay.
Where had it gone, that confidence
He had that day he sailed away?

Remembering some words he had,
He'd copied them while out at sea;
He pulled them out, his heart turned glad,
As sitting, he began to read.

That verse his hand held tightly there,
"Do not fear, nor be dismayed;
The Lord is with you everywhere."
Encouragement this verse conveyed.

His mind began to wonder to
The Lord of all who sent His Son;
To die for me and die for you,
So we could live with Him as one.

Then suddenly there came a crash,
He realized he was back at war.
The time had come to run and dash,
The verse he had his hand still bore.

He ran out in that open span,
With courage, though knowing he could die;
Yet knowing his God had a plan,
With God forever he'd stand by.

I can't take credit for this because it was written by my sister. What do you think?

Answer 1

I think she is unbelievable talented.

I spent 2 years in combat. Sounds like she has been there.

Answer 2

Congratulations for such a beautiful poem!
That's why ...
"Each New Day is God's gift, to hold and to treasure. Every moment today makes up forever and slips silently by. Help us O Lord to give You back, at the end of this day your gift of time. Enriched with your kindness, love and truth. Faster than a blinking eye, see what this great dawn offers you. And let us not waste it - in useless gripe, and resentful tones."

Answer 3

You would have a very good narrative poem if there was a set meter pattern and constant rhyme. It is just a bit more work.

Answer 4

It's a great poem.

It's obvious the young man in the poem had great faith, faith I never had.

Answer 5

It's very nicely written.