My Hope Is Built on Nothing Less
"My hope is built on nothing less
Than Jesus' blood and righteousness;
I dare not trust the sweetest frame,
But wholly lean on Jesus' name:
On Christ, the solid rock, I stand;
All other ground is sinking sand.
When He shall come with trumpet sound,
O, may I then in Him be found;
Dress'd in His righteousness alone,
I faultless stand before the throne.
On Christ, the solid rock, I stand;
All other ground is sinking sand."
~ Edward Mote
2007-05-19 10:48:08 · 24 answers · asked by Basilia Harmonia 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Thats a good poem
2007-05-19 10:50:09 · answer #1 · answered by cypress7602 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Edward, for a beginning poem writer you did very well. It's the feeling inside your heart that comes out of the poem. The second part might need a little work. Something like this, "
When the Lord comes with trumpets abound,
Ohh may I then-through him be found.
My love and righteousness for him alone,
Am I faultless to stand before this throne?
On Christ the Solid Rock I stand,
All other ground is just sinking sand.
Edward I'm not trying to change the effort and the meaning of your poem , but just a way with some of the words to get the same meaning . Flowing of words, rythem is all important in poem writing. Sentence structure. I try not to get fancy by shortening words. Full words give more body to the poem. You did good though. You did good. Keep working at it, because God is guiding you and you can't go wrong with that.
2007-05-19 18:13:54 · answer #2 · answered by LARRY P 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like that poem! Probably like a 9 or 10 out of 10.
2007-05-19 17:51:53 · answer #3 · answered by sam79241 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like what you have to say. The content is wonderful. The rhyming is okay if you are writing for children or younger people. For me though I felt that the sing-song rhyming took away from the message you were trying to present. Just my opinion.
2007-05-19 17:53:28 · answer #4 · answered by The PENsive Insomniac 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I give it a 10 on the scale from 1 to 10 (10 being COMPLETE nonsense.)
2007-05-19 17:52:23 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like the refrain a lot. I think that it goes great with the idea. I also like the couplets.
2007-05-19 17:52:18 · answer #6 · answered by Morgan U 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The theme lacks credibility.But the choice of words is good.
2007-05-19 17:51:41 · answer #7 · answered by SAVISIVA 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Amen!!!! Thank You Jesus for your gift of Grace, Salvation, Guidance and Love.......Awesome poem!!! Lord bless
2007-05-19 17:51:09 · answer #8 · answered by heavenboundiwillbe 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
One word: AMAZING. That is a beautiful poem. I believe that it fully expresses how faith in God should lay, and it brings a beautiful touch of serenity. This is an outstanding poem that should be recognized through faith/religion.
2007-05-19 17:52:42 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Not so fond of the sentiment. I think that God is bigger than religion, and the large scale social choice of the 'right' religion is the cause of alot of hatred and death.
2007-05-19 17:51:16 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋