Mallory Snyder first appeared in the public eye when she appeared as a cast member on The Real World: Paris, which aired in 2003. Upon returning from Paris, Snyder decided to try modeling and almost immediately found success, appearing in the 2005 and 2006 Sports Illustrated magazine’s annual swimsuit issue. She has also modeled for the Abercrombie & Fitch and J.Crew clothing lines in addition to a 2006 appearance in Self Magazine.
2007-05-19 06:22:37 · 3 answers · asked by mbw m 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
Mallory Snyder appeared in the public eye for the first time as a cast member on "The real worl: Paris", aired in 2003. Upon returning from Paris, Snyder decided to try modeling, finding success almost immediately by appearing in 2005 and 2006 Sports Illustrated Magazine's annual swimsuit issue. She also modeled clothing lines from Ambercrombie &Fitch and J. Crew, in addition to an appearance in Self Magazine in 2006.
2007-05-19 06:34:54 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nothing much needs to be corrected except for the overuse of 'appeared.' Good writers try to use key words but once on a page. Use a synonym for one instance of 'appeared' and also 'appearing' since they are so closely connected.
2007-05-19 06:32:09 · answer #2 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Guitarpick is correct. You can technically leave it exactly as is, although some changes to the words "appear" would enhance the paragraph.
2007-05-19 06:43:43 · answer #3 · answered by stellaromana22 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋