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I really want to write a book and I was just wondering if you thought if this would look good on like the back of a book * not sure what its called*? If its a good idea? Or if you think I have potential to be a author? I am 13 by the way.

Meet Claire Von Johnson a beautiful "A-List" girl who has everything. Model looks, a huge house , the latest things, and tons of money. With out a doubt, this Beverly hill, girl is pretty much what every teen want to be. Summers out and Claire is ecstatic to find out that the whole family is going on a luxury vacation to Tahiti. However, when she thinks nothing bad can happen she learns the truth. A terrible plan crash occurs resulting in her parents death. Alone and miserable, will Claire find someone who will help her through this? Is Claire going to be able to handle this long summer of hate, love, despair, riches and possibly murder?


Well that’s all I have ! Don’t be that rude!! Thanks!

WOW everyones is sooo much more positive than yesterday..i got yelled at and said i wasnt good lol...thanks for the spelling help, i did word check maybe it didnt show...ill add more details and post it tho!!! Thanks so much!

Answer 1

lol im not a very god critic but i would say thats good! and great 4 a gurl ur age!!! =D

Answer 2

It sounds great! It's just that there are a few grammar mistakes in the summary thing. I don't want to be a grammar freak but this is just to help. Here is the revised version of your summary:

Meet Claire Von Johnson, a beautiful A-List girl who has everything--model looks, a huge house, the latest things, and tons of money. Without a doubt, this Beverly Hill girl is pretty much what every teen wants to be. Summer's out, and Claire is ecstatic to find out that her whole family is going on a luxury vacation to Tahiti. However, when she thinks nothing bad can happen, she learns the truth: A terrible plane crash occurs, resulting in her parents' death. Will Claire find someone who will help her through this? Is Claire going to be able to handle this long summer of hate, love, despair, riches and possibly murder?

By the way, the name "Von Johnson" doesn't really make sense. "Von" is Dutch and "Johnson" is Scandinavian, I think. Here's a good site for last names:

http://www.last-names.net/

Other than that, your story sounds pretty cool. It'd be a big hit if it came out.

Answer 3

Sounds interesting. I don't usually read books like these but I like yours. A couple of mistakes you might want to fix like these:

- Comma after Johnson
- Without is ONE word
- It's Beverly Hills, not Beverly hill. And you don't need the comma after Hills.
- You mean; "What every teen wantS to be"?
- I don't think you need that However before the when... and what truth does she learn? Rephrase it like this: "She thinks nothing could go wrong until a terrible planE crash occurs, resulting in her parents deaths."
- Instead of phrasing this as a question, put it like this; "Alone and miserable, Claire has to find someone who will help her through this. But who?"

I like the ending. Good job. ^^ And remember, you DON'T have to use all the suggestions I suggested. =)

P.S. I'm 12. (I bet you wouldn't have guessed though. =P).So if you want to talk about writing, e-mail me.

Answer 4

a beautiful "A-List" girl who has everything. Model looks, a huge house , the latest things, and tons of money.

Ive heard this words so many times in other books, try something different. i would give an example but im not much of a writer.

it has a good plot though i would read it.

Answer 5

Good except its pretty ,much just a book out of the clique series. The character has the same name and everything. A little cliche but great for just 13.

Answer 6

hm... well it sounds like a cute story...
I'm a writer myself, and you will learn this as you get older as well that the storyline is very cliche.
its very good! but very typical.
there are probably a thousand books out there with the same base storyline.
good luck with your writing in the future though, i think you are on the right track.
i remember when i was 13 and i wanted to write books too.
just keep writing and trying, okay? don't let anyone discourage you. who knows, you could be the next Agatha Christie. :)

Answer 7

It seems very good! I would read it, but the storyline seems a bit overdone, maybe add a few elements of trouble starting at school, or her parents showing a few signs of bad things happening, or other things that could show her life could be getting worse, but she just ignores it. But it sounds very good, I would just keep on trying and trying, and eventually you could be a great author! It sounds like you are well on your way! Good Job!

Answer 8

Generally people write the book first and the blurb later but it does sound like an interesting idea for a book. Good luck with it.

Answer 9

it's off to a good start, but i must be honest. Its loosing my interest because i'm not seeing a plot. it sounds like it's about 2 be a short story rather than a book. make sure you use the key parts of any good story: Main character, protaganist, antaganist, setting, plot, climax, rising and falling action, and conclusion.

Answer 10

Not at all bad for a 13-year-old. You do need to do some more proofreading, though. Or was "a terrible plan crash" meant to be a pun?

Answer 11

it sounds like a book i would read. everything i want in a novel
cant wait for the book
it sounds kinda typical but i would still read it cuz every book is different.
this looks sooo good on the back of a book
i can just see it now