A chipper little visitor
Came to visit me.
He sat and sang a solo,
In my little pecan tree.
He sang of joy and laughter
Of sun and wind and rain.
And when he flew away.
I didn't feel the pain.
Some would say that it is silly.
A coincidence, no more.
But that bird made my day brighter.
And that's what he came here for.
I will not see him tomorrow,
But I really do not care.
I asked him to visit you,
And with you his song share.
So if you get a friend
Who sings a song so sweet.
Please know that red bird came.
To make your day complete.
2007-05-15 01:28:10 · 12 answers · asked by Debra M. Wishing Peace To All 7 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Very nice, Debra. I will be looking for that bird !!
2007-05-15 01:31:39 · answer #1 · answered by RB 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I am listening to the birds singing right now, the sound is sweet. Thankyou for the good tidings, I send them back, on wings of blue.
2007-05-15 08:39:29 · answer #2 · answered by Lukusmcain// 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
It's very sweet. I love the idea. Have you considered writing without a rhyme scheme? I think the rhyming detracts from the message.
2007-05-15 08:41:11 · answer #3 · answered by ZombieTrix 2012 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
the 'flow' is a little awkward in places (recite it a couple of times) but compared to what I usually see on here it is positively brimming with potential. The subject matter is not entirely my thing but its sweet.
2007-05-15 08:34:24 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
Hehe, I read this while I was sitting under my Japanese maple, and a cardinal was neardby. What a coincidence!
It is very pretty...
2007-05-15 18:49:07 · answer #5 · answered by Shinkirou Hasukage 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thank you for sharing. That is a nice poem Debra.
2007-05-15 08:32:38 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
It was very nice, and thank you. You have no idea how much I needed a pick me up today.
2007-05-15 08:44:30 · answer #7 · answered by bran72072 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's amazing. Really impressive.
2007-05-15 08:39:43 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
Very sweet!
2007-05-15 08:39:06 · answer #9 · answered by SDC 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Very sweet.
2007-05-15 08:48:29 · answer #10 · answered by Stephanie C 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋