what do you think... a poem i wrote?

Question

please be honest and tell me what you think

As I lay in my bed at night
Holding my stuffed dog nice and tight
I lay here and think about you
Wondering if your thinking about me too
We will be friends until the end no matter what comes our way
And no matter what other people say
As im laying in bed I start to ponder
And my mind starts to wonder
The thoughts of you and I
Makes me get all shy
I want us to have more
But we are just shutting that door
I fall asleep and start dreaming about what we could have together
And I wonder if life would be any better
I wake up the next day
With not a whole lot to say
Hoping that my dreams will come true
Because I’m tired of feeling blue and just waiting for you

Answer 1

sort of a sad ending but I like the part about you getting shy, that really expresses a genuine feeling you have for that moment, not too deep in detail, but it's a good poem no less.

don't hesitate; go for it. believe me, you will feel a lot better knowing if there is a chance or not.

Answer 2

I think you have a gift for putting feelings into words. I don't think this is the greatest poem in the world, but you made me remember when I was a teen, and the guy I liked. You put me *right* there! And that's a huge gift. Keep trying -- I think you've got great potential.

Answer 3

I think the rythym is slightly off, but other than that, it's a great poem. You have a talent for accurately portraying teen puppy love. ~sniffs~

This is good stuff, and with practice, I know you can do even better. Good luck, and God bless!

Answer 4

its a great poem about life and a relationship and you express the girls feeling very well i think you have a great poem here great job

Answer 5

It makes you dream!

Answer 6

Whoo!!! Whoo!!! More! More! More!