Has anyone ever told you how beautiful you are?
so beautiful and here you are with me.
From the very first I noticed, you are God's gift to all of us,
and the holder of a very special key.
Do people try to stop you, so they can say "I love you"?
you spread love with every step you take.
Has anyone ever mentioned, you're a beautiful work of art?
you filled the hollow chambers in my heart.
You mean no one's ever whispered "You're nothing less than a miracle?".
well you're nothing less than a miracle to me.
Is it okay to tell you, that just your elegant presence, makes me want to wrap myself in thee?
2007-04-22 07:43:37 · 26 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
If you give that to your gf she will faint.
2007-04-22 07:46:22 · answer #1 · answered by Angelacia baybeeeeee 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Nice 9 out of 10
2007-04-22 14:47:26 · answer #2 · answered by commonsense2265 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
there's no rhythm to the poem, there's no picture painted at all, it is littered with cliches about love instead of actual feeling and personal thought. the last stanza breaks format. The second to last stanza is repetitious and redundant. You never expand on what this "special key" is. Is this girl really God's gift to everyone, or just to you?
with that said, i'm sure that the girl who you wrote it for will at least appreciate the setiment. i hope that my candor didn't hurt your feelings too much or anything like that.
2007-04-22 14:50:38 · answer #3 · answered by Michael L 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow, um, for all those who gave you a perfect rating, they obviously don't know what they are talking about.
I mean, I like the effort and I'm sure your girlfriend would think it's cute but it's pretty corny and cliche...and not very deep at all.
I'd give it a 3/10.
2007-04-22 18:32:12 · answer #4 · answered by ♥♥♥♥♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"God's gift to all of us?"
"Special key?"
"Beautiful work of art?"
"Hollow chambers in my heart?"
If I can think of any cliches that you left out, I'll let you know.
Okay, so that was a little bit harsh. I actually like it alright, and I especially like the flow of the poem.
2007-04-22 14:47:27 · answer #5 · answered by Bobby S 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
from 1 to 10, i'd rate it a 8
2007-04-22 14:46:44 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
get rid of verse 5...other than that, well...it's ok but not the best I've heard. scale 1-10 give a 6
2007-04-22 14:47:34 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should be an artist. I felt that in my heart! I'll give you 5 stars (from one through five)! AND AN A+ & 100% on your LA report! ^__^
2007-04-22 14:47:00 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 10 outta 10. Good job.
2007-04-22 14:45:49 · answer #9 · answered by Colorado 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like wedding vows. Very nice.
2007-04-22 14:46:24 · answer #10 · answered by LadeeBug Buddha 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
perfect 5 star
2007-04-22 14:46:01 · answer #11 · answered by No Name 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋