The truth of life. The truth of life might be confusing to understand but before we were all created, aliens ruled over Earth. The aliens wanted new living life forms. They first created animals and bugs but they didn’t think that was enough. They wanted something that could think, learn, and have free will. Then, they made a formula and it made us. Thanks to aliens, we are here. The aliens had been watching over us for a comedy show. They’d have cameras that were invisible and they would capture funny things that happened to people. One day, a person accidentally bumped into one of the invisible cameras and then the invisibility on the camera wore off. Then he saw that it was made by aliens. Then the top scientists studied and studied and finally found the truth on how we were created. He said, ”ALIENS!”. Then he made a book and wrote about the truth behind life. This scientists name was professor Jakor Kator. Jakor Kator was the most smartest scientists in the world. He would study things for hours and figure out the truth. After the aliens found out we knew that they created us, they came to Earth and destroyed us all. Then they started with apes and made them dumber. But all of a sudden, the apes, thousands of years later, turned back into us. Then a new scientist, professor Jack Wattson, had gone on a mission to Mars, and he saw buildings. When he stepped out of the space ship, there was oxygen everywhere. Then aliens saw him. He took out his camera and recorded it to take back to Earth, but he was killed before he could make it back to Earth. His camera floated into space and back to Earth. A man was going into his car to go to work and he saw a camera on the ground. He turned it on and he looked what movies were on it. The man saw the amazing video and uploaded it to his computer and put it on the internet. Then he showed it to the top scientists and they were amazed. They considered the aliens as there Gods. They went back to Mars and they were killed. Then Mars and Earth were at war. Every alien and every human being was destroyed. Nothing was there anymore. Then life gave up hope.
THE END
2007-04-21 15:55:55 · 5 answers · asked by tommym720 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
What do you think of it?
2007-04-21 15:56:32 · update #1
Im not a writer.I was just seeing if you think this is a good story.Im only 11 years old.
2007-04-21 16:02:24 · update #2
4/20 was good to you HUH?
2007-04-21 15:59:03 · answer #1 · answered by MONK 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
stay in school.
if you're an adult,
don't quit your day job.
sorry to be blunt, but if you really want to write stories, take some courses.
ADDED: You're 11? Then I must apologize; you came across older but unpolished.
What you have is a good outline of a story. It needs detail.
There's a saying in writing: Show us, don't tell us.
Take just one of your sentences: there could be paragraphs or pages exploring them in detail, making them more real, more convincing.
If you're 11, you've got all the time in the world to develop. Read more; pay attention to how stories are crafter. You're off to a good start!
2007-04-21 22:58:24 · answer #2 · answered by kent_shakespear 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Nice story. Very commendable but the aliens part really tuned me off. It could have been better.
2007-04-21 22:59:49 · answer #3 · answered by Professor 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
May God bless you with His Love!
Write and pray! Pray and write!
take good care of your soul! God loves you and takes care of you, stay with HIM!
Have a good life!
PS: If you like to write and you pray...God will help you do His work! Have a great life!
2007-04-24 13:01:28 · answer #4 · answered by tatal_nostru2006 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
The film would have been exposed by all the radiation in space.
FOOL! Your SOUL is MINE!
2007-04-21 23:01:35 · answer #5 · answered by Shinigami 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋