Can you edit my short devotional letter, please? English is my second language, so I need this letter in perfect grammar and make senese. I would be apprecative this very much. Thank you!!!
2007-04-20 20:10:33 · 4 answers · asked by LLL 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
When Problems Arise
Shortly after I became saved, almost 3 years ago, I made a bad choice. I should have asked someone to pray for me or had someone help me with the sin I had, but I didn’t. It was horrible. After this happened, I recognized how it impacted and changed me. It felt like I tore God’s heart.
I was told that I need have someone to hold me accountable to make good choices. Then I found a scripture in Proverbs 27:17 “As iron sharpens iron, a friend sharpens a friend”. This verse, I believe, means we should encourage each other and be open to our friends. Also, Hebrews 10:25 “[…] let us not neglect our meeting together, as some people do, but encourage and warn each other […]”. This verse talks about how we shouldn’t stop “meeting together”.
2007-04-20 20:10:56 · update #1
Since then, whenever something bad comes into my thoughts or tempts me, I have to stop and pray, and then I think a few good scriptures and I find someone that I can talk to before I continue, because if I didn’t and then my life is lost. It will be like I have fallen in water that goes deeper and deeper, and it become so dark. For me, it is impossible to overcome bad thoughts or avoid sinning without help from God and His people. God has blessed me very much for repenting.
Of course, I made mistakes in different ways; however, those failures also helped me grow spiritually. I become closer to God through those defeats. God will bless my efforts to stop sinning and will use His word (and my Christian friends) to change my thoughts and actions.
2007-04-20 20:11:20 · update #2
Maybe you could consider the following:
1.What precisely you intend to convey by saying 'became saved' isn't clear to me. If you had been saved from some calamity or disaster, you could say so.
2.The 'bad choice' is not mentioned, unless it refers to anything other than asking someone to pray for you or help you.
3. Instead of 'the sin I had', could you say '..or asked someone to help me get over my sin' (or similar words)?
4. The first sentence starting "Since then, whenever....life is lost" is rather long, and you could think of breaking it into shorter sentences for clearer understanding.
5. Add 'of' between 'think' and 'a few good'.
6. Change 'become' to either 'becomes' or to 'became'.
(These are a few ideas that strike me. No offense is meant.
Your effort is excellent, considering English is your second language. I quite appreciate your writing skills.)
2007-04-20 22:33:10 · answer #1 · answered by greenhorn 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow, I have to say, for English being your second language, your writing is very good.
There are no major mistakes,
the only thing to change would be "I stop and pray and think OF a few good scriptures." You just left out the word "of"
But, great job
2007-04-21 03:31:28 · answer #2 · answered by allforasia 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I already did---it is in your folder. Took a nap after supper.
2007-04-21 04:44:02 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
what exactly you want to do?
SK
2007-04-21 03:42:16 · answer #4 · answered by Saint Kabir 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋