Can you please rate my NEW POEM?

Question

"Not Ready"
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I was ready,
ready to take you on.
Your shouts of pure frustration,
and verbal abuse.
Waiting for them to attack me,
I already knew what to expect.
My stance was strong,
as I awaited the screaming,
and vociferation,
I was ready.

I was ready,
ready to argue,
and fight through quarrels.
I cleared my throat,
so my voice could be vocal and crisp.
Later though,
my throat would become scratchy,
for there's only so much yelping I can do.
I await the bickering,
I was ready.

I was ready,
ready for your blows of madness.
Your swinging arms,
and fierce hands.
Your lashing out legs,
with your held-tight fists.
For the way you don't falter,
I was ready.

I was ready,
ready to annihilate you.
To defend my frail body,
from your wicked ways.
Protect myself from your hostile movements,
and your assassinations.
Guard my life with all my might,
to keep me safe from you,
I was ready.

I was ready,
but I can't do it anymore,
I can’t proceed.
Too weak and fragile to argue,
I’m afraid I’ll break if I continue.
Don’t want to waste away,
as I break away.
So you win,
I was ready,
but now I’m not.
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I know its sort of long, but what do you think of it? I am 14 years old. Could you please rate it on a scale from 1 to 10?

THANK YOU!

Answer 1

I can certainly feel the effort you put into this...and more importantly, the emotions...the fear, the desperation, the fatigue...I give you a 9.5 for the rawness of the feelings delivered in the poem, nice feat for a 14 year old...

I also think that if you are interested in writing poems...dive into it...read William Wordsworth and Shel Silverstein...Whatever style tickle your interest. Join a poets club...Read what people write about those poems...

You will find a wonderfully complex world of poems out there...that can help you expand in so many ways...

After all...being able to critique your own poem is just as important (if not more so) than having others do it for you...

Answer 2

2

Answer 3

I think it is very impressive but just needs a little editing to make the emotions rise more dramtically and then fall again in the last stanza. Think of it like a piece of music getting louder and wilder and then suddenly becoming quieter till it stops.
If this poem is based on your own experiences, I feel for you. I think it is very brave of you to try to express yourself, especially in poetry. I couldn't do it ! I give you a 9/10. If you do decide to edit the poem, post it again, I would like to see it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Answer 4

Pretty depressing, but i feel no sorrow, someone in need of a bad boy and can't stop because thats whats she's attracted to. She loves the attention and pitty from others, the drama and feeling sorry for herself. Its a poem from a troubled woman who doesn't realize she does this to herself and wants it, its her own fault.
Good peom about a troubled young woman

Answer 5

Considering your age i would give it a 10

Answer 6

For your age I think that I would rate it a 10

Answer 7

9 if not a 10 its really good, really detailed and full of passion and pain keep writing u seem to have a good talent for it

Answer 8

You can do better. Too long. Try again to compact the emotion into a crystal of truth and then polish it for brilliance.

You have talent poem is too verbose.

Answer 9

i like it!

scale 1-10

i would give you an 8-

only b/c it would sound better hearing the poet read it.

= D

Answer 10

i like it i give it a 10