Do you like my prayer?

Question

Dear God

I want to tell you how new-born you can make me feel;

how saddened I am by the weight you carry in your mind;

God, how I fail with you; but how you give me hope, and a place to be;

how you console me when I want to quit;

how you keep me looking at myself;

my pride in the meaning of our life together;

how we saved each other from loneliness and more dying;

because you make me feel better than I would;

as if we said, "Here. This way. This is where I belong."

Answer 1

I loved it John.. thanks for sharing baby....

Answer 2

It's lovely, Sister Margaret, though I'm a bit confused about the verse that reads, "how we saved each other from loneliness and more dying." I suppose I can imagine a mortal saving God from loneliness (though if he indeed hears all prayers, I doubt he could ever be lonely), but from death? Or am I misreading?

Answer 3

LOL! Clever move! It looks like you're praying to God, but in reality your hunger for compliments get fed! Wasn't it Yeshua who said that the people who pray at the street corners, with great gestures and exposition, already received their rewards?

Answer 4

It's beautiful and inspirational. I like it, in the sense that I can embrace it even though it's other than my personal philosophy. Nicely done.

Answer 5

The Banana Snake says nope It's stupid. God wont listen to or read it. He'll just file it away under miscellaneous and later carelessly trash it.

Answer 6

Beautiful! you should write a book of prayers sister margaret.

Answer 7

That's beautiful

Answer 8

Why do you and the first answerer look the same? Im confused are you twins?

Answer 9

Slack.

Answer 10

yea I like it, only one thing, it doesn't sound natural, I don't feel it. Sounds like you're trying to turn another poem into another memorized prayer.

Answer 11

Sweet poem.