Rating: 10 is the best
0 is not good
Amie's Lovely Poem
Love is like a box of chocolate,
One moment love looks good,
The last moment feels free,
Best of all denying is not an option
Love can taste sweet,
Love can fall sick,
Love can be great,
Love can do well
My love for you, is all i give.
2007-04-12 19:27:36 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
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2007-04-12 19:32:03 · answer #1 · answered by skilletfan911 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
8
2007-04-12 19:29:55 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a good poem!
however if i were to rate it i would give it say a 7. one reason being I dont completely understand it. What does love can do well have to do with a box of chocolates, or love can fall sick have to do with chocolate? And the other thing i do not like, is the first line. Love is like a box of chocolate. That is too forrest gump. Think of your own original line, similar to that but different explaining your emotion. I like your ideas, but make them specifically your own!
Sorry to play devils advocate! just my opinion. However, I think your definately on the right track!
cheers!
2007-04-12 19:32:26 · answer #3 · answered by Tropicalboy 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I'm being generous, I say its about a 2 1/2 - 3. It doesn't make sense. It doesn't rhythm.
It's non sense, your rambling, there isn't even a clearly established pattern.. the more I think about it, this poem is a 1 at best.
2007-04-12 19:35:50 · answer #4 · answered by Sports Guy 786 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
everyone can benefit from editing.
but it's your thing. your deal.
but to me it sounds like 2 separate poems.
the stanzas don't quite fit
chocolate
then
taste sweet, but the other 3 don't quite fit?
love can be sweet,
love can taste bitter,
etc......see my point.
my love is wrapped for you or unwrapped or
you know something related to the chocolate thing.
but you definitely have something going there and i'd give it a 7+1/2.
bring us more. i like your work.
2007-04-12 19:43:05 · answer #5 · answered by fiver 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice You Like Chocolate....
2007-04-12 19:30:45 · answer #6 · answered by syd_da_beat 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow - very original and not what I expected. A good poem, I'd say 5/10.
2007-04-12 19:30:30 · answer #7 · answered by sweet_leaf 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not really that good.
how 'bout this....
I know that my gift is late,
I had to wait 'till i got paid.
But if this gift turns out just right,
I just might get laid.
That's an original by me.
Thank-you.
JD
2007-04-12 19:33:11 · answer #8 · answered by mike oxbig 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good simile, though. Could be better. 7. Peace!
Keep working on your poetry. You can go somewhere with it.
2007-04-12 19:30:50 · answer #9 · answered by Drivliam 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It doesnt matter what rating I give it...it matter how it makes you and the person you are writing it for feels.
2007-04-12 19:30:13 · answer #10 · answered by d_khar 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its has alot om meaning but it don't rhyme i give it a 3
2007-04-12 19:30:54 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋