Can I get some constructive criticism on my literary analysis?

Question

“To be great is to be misunderstood” Emerson refers to greatness often in his essay. In his essay he illustrates what one needs to be great and defines what that means. Emerson uses his aphorisms in Self Reliance to illiterate how society holds individuals back from greatness by making them fear self trust.
Emerson emphasizes on self trust. He expresses that self trust and individuality is the key to greatness. In the essay Emerson voice that people need to search for what’s good or bad according to them rather than let society tell them and live by the laws according to them. “He who would gather immortal palms must not be hindered by the name of goodness but must explore if it be goodness”. He tells us that we can’t let society hinder our ideas.

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Emerson also expresses that society uses consistency as a weapon to keep people from speaking their minds. “…the eyes of others have no other data for computing our orbit than our past acts….” This means society will use ones past act as reference to who that person is. Consistency is used as a weapon because people fear being misunderstood. They don’t want to go against what they have said before so they don’t say anything.
Society disapproves of nonconformity. They don’t want people to go against the majority. “For nonconformity the world whips you with its displeasures.” Emerson mentions many great thinkers that the world rejected who trusted themselves and told the world what they thought

Answer 1

The second part is much better than the first. Read the first part carefully as you have problems with words. Emerson emphasizes self trust and individuality as the key to success. Emerson says that people...tell them and live by societies' laws. The quote should have " at both beginning and end and "if it be goodness." Change the place of the period inside the quotes. The first sentence ends with "to be misunderstood." Don't have two "in his essay's" in a row. In fact, delete that clause as where else would it be? Defines what being great means where you mention it. "making them fearful of self trust.

Just match up the sentences and it will improve. I promise.

Answer 2

Wow, there's a lot there, but the first thing I noticed were spelling and grammatical errors. Run it through spell-check and also make sure you use the correct word (ex. you used illiterate instead of illustrate.) Use more quotes also and compare this work to some other well known work, let's say by Thoreau.