I wrote it for someone. Be honest please. I don't know how else to tell her...
Saying I don't care,
Then I have to take it back.
Because deep inside I know
With you I'm right on track
You walk around these halls,
And you're hanging by a thread.
You're trying not to show it
But I know you're feeling dead.
Someone tell me why
You do these things you do.
I'm falling out of grace today,
I'm still not over you.
I wish that I could just erase
All the pain you cause.
I'm fabricating such an act
My life deserves applause.
My hero is all you were.
I look at you and I concur,
Either you love me like before
Or I'm convincing myself even more,
That you miss me more than I do.
But the fact is here
I'm never gonna be over you.
You're in my mind with each second passed.
I'd always thought our love would last.
Such bitter words escape my mouth
Because it's you I'm thinking all about.
So I hear your voice or I see your face
And your memory can't be replaced.
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2007-04-08 18:20:15 · 8 answers · asked by Mitch 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
All that I can think about
Is how unfortunate that I'm without
Your smile to see, your laugh to hear
Your touch to feel and know you're near.
2007-04-08 18:20:31 · update #1
P.S. She's my ex... I can't really find it in myself to let go of her. I want to make it work I just don't really know how to go about it. I love her, and I miss her. And please don't tell me to give up, because I can't quit on her now.
2007-04-08 18:29:53 · update #2
Put a beat to it and use it for a love song! Sounds better than all this "Girl I wanna jump in yo pants cause the way you dance makes me wanna get busy between your legs in a dance of romance"!
2007-04-08 18:25:07 · answer #1 · answered by johnnie b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Quick hint: this girl is probably going to think that is pretty creepy. You're trying way too hard by writing all this poetry and stuff. It shows a certain degree of desperation. This isn't the Olympics . . . you don't get extra points for making it hard on yourself! Just try talking to her and hanging out normally! You don't need to put on airs or compose some epic poetry, all you need to do is be yourself! Good night!
2007-04-09 01:26:57 · answer #2 · answered by anonymous 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG u r a great poet..
You have got great talent. dont waste it..
I understand u do have feelings for her..may be she is ur inspiration to write such a wonderful poem. Just show this to her. if she is really sensible and if she really loves u even now then she will welcome u with 'open arms'.. otherwise cry ur heart out. write another poem like this and let EVERYBODY know that u can write such a beautiful poem.
Please plz plz do something and get some recognition for ur talent..
All the best..
(i wish i were that girl!!!)
2007-04-09 09:34:27 · answer #3 · answered by MOKSHA 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I believe that this poem is more for you than her. Putting your feelings on paper is great way to vent. Don't give it to her just wait. Wait one week and then read it again. Then write another one. See how you feel then.
2007-04-09 01:25:17 · answer #4 · answered by LisaLou 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is an excellent poem!!if i were that gurl, i'll will feel very lucky since i know that someone do really2 love me a lot and i'm very sure that she will feel the same way as i do.... so go on man!!!! =)
2007-04-09 01:29:20 · answer #5 · answered by nebula pluto 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That sounds good. It tells how you feel and is sweet at the same time. Give it to her!
2007-04-09 01:25:46 · answer #6 · answered by trisha l 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that is creative and poetic. I wish I had your writing abilities.
2007-04-09 01:24:04 · answer #7 · answered by Professor Cuddles III 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
God, that is beautiful. Sensible ...
G. luck with her ...
2007-04-09 01:46:34 · answer #8 · answered by NA 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋