Correct my English grammar?

Question

Regarding his studies, Brian is actually following a normal year, with major in science. He concentrated more on skating during the 2001-2002 season as he skated at Europeans (bronze medal!) and World Championships, and at the Olympic Games. In the long term specter, Brian thinks about getting his diploma to become a coach, and why not later becoming the manager of the French Teams.

His main goal is clear : to become European, World and Olympic champion ! His best souvenir so far : the parade of the Oympic Game opening ceremony. His best element in skating : jumps with four rotation if possible... The loop is his least-favored jump, even though he has already landed it in combination after a triple flip. Besides the jumps, another element he like is simply forward crossovers, because 'when you do them right you don't feel the ice anymore'.

Answer 1

You start out in the present tense and then change to past tense (concentrated). Modify the word to read concentrates.

". . . with major in science . . ." should read: "with a major in science . . ."

(bronze medal!) should read: (where he earned the Bronze Medal.)

Lose the word 'specter' where appearing.

". . . and why not later becoming the manager of the French Teams." should end with a question mark because of "why not later." I recommend deleting that portion of the sentence because it can appear awkward. Instead, modify the sentence to read: "and even considers becoming the manager of the French Teams."


You have a surplus of colons in your narrative. Consider omitting a few and plug in the necessary words.

"another element he like is . . . )= he likes is the correct form.

The ending period is always inside the ending quotation mark, never on the outside, i.e., . . . "when you do them right you don't feel the ice anymore."

Answer 2

With regard to his studies,

skated at the European and World Championships,

In the long term,

and later becoming the manager...




Perfect, other than that!

Answer 3

do it yourself.