I recieved this poem by a friend and I would all like u to tell him how beautiful this poem is..
its by:Papiculo
I watch u walk up with man-
I've never seen before.
U introduce me as "a friend"
Well who culd ask for more?
I smile and ask how u hav ben,
Trying no 2 let the pain show.
All the while dying deep within
A lov i cant let go.
I find im stil prone to sunlight shone-
Over highlights on golden tresses-
Of soft hair glistening, reminiscing-
In my thoughts ur sweet caresses.
Mystifying eyes still mesmerize-
My mind, lik diamond gleaming.
In memory of u & me-
I find myself daydreaming.
Then, my worse fear, pulling me near,
A kiss upon the cheek.
I pray u dont see, like glass, through me-
How ur touch still makes me weak.
I turn my head in nervous dread-
You'll note the tear in my eye.
To catch my breath i giv a deep sigh,
But, then, i hear u say goodbye.
My heart reeling in desperate feeling,
Screams out from emptiness.
Words in my head forever left unsaid-
As i only wish u happiness.
U walk away holding his hand'
An image time seems to suspend.
For in all held true, i never knew-
It could hurt so bad to have"a friend"
2007-04-03 02:47:19 · 10 answers · asked by G?ld?n ang?l 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
oh wow that was one of the best poems I ever read...it almost made me cry no joke! just the spelling is off in someplaces.
2007-04-03 02:53:29 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is amazingly sturdy for a newbie, there is defiantly some great imagery in it, even nevertheless it styles of lacks direction, its slightly confusing, it starts off with you happy you have got here across somebody, yet they are no longer truly yours? and then they bypass away, it truly is a superb storyline, yet you will possibly be able to desire to illustrate a element interior the poem while they bypass away. It does not incredibly rhyme in places, which i do no longer blame you for, rhyming poems are very very confusing, so possibly you will possibly desire to easily attempt non rhyming poems first of all. in case you like the belief of rhyming nonetheless, attempt purely making it lyrical while spoken, counting the syllables in step with line is a sturdy thank you to try this. Poetry could be exciting and extremely pleasing, i think of you will possibly desire to proceed, you additionally could make some money! yet you will possibly be able to desire to purchase a e book on writing poetry to truly get the wonderful effects, i'm going with to advise "the ode much less travelled: unlocking the poet interior" by ability of Stephen Fry, he's marvelous and and extremely relaxing.
2016-11-25 22:58:17 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9/10
2007-04-03 02:57:09 · answer #3 · answered by <3 ...sEz... <3 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awesome.
2007-04-03 02:50:53 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
waaaaaaaaw its amazing poem 10 from 10 and star from me
nice story and nice words
2007-04-03 03:21:33 · answer #5 · answered by micho 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a good poem i really like it
2007-04-03 02:54:32 · answer #6 · answered by kelcihrn 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
one word fantastic
he/she should be a poet
2007-04-03 04:16:53 · answer #7 · answered by Frihah Anti-Milanist 4lyf! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow! thats good.
2007-04-03 02:51:24 · answer #8 · answered by delia 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good
2007-04-03 02:54:33 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very very very very very good !!!!!!
11/10
I cried
2007-04-03 05:22:32 · answer #10 · answered by janetjacksoniscool 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋