This is a poem I wrote recently
My Father , my brother , my Saviour
My Father, brother, my Saviour
Jesus, my heart I give to you
No shame in how I feel
Proud to sing your name
You are humble in all your strength
Words of faith bind, do not sting
My Father, brother, my Saviour
Jesus, my heart I give to you
Morning hours, your creations shine
Smiles on our face of confidence devine
We call to you in prayer
Daily steps along your side, glorify your name
My Father, brother, my Saviour
Jesus my heart I give to you
In times of trouble, look above
Know your spirit is full of love
Jesus, Jesus, my heart I give to you
Thank you for taking the time to read this I welcome all and any opions on how you feel of my poem,,,,,By pass
2007-04-01 12:38:31 · 20 answers · asked by bypass 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
In the literary world..I would say this needs work but I say to you..don't dare change a word. it is a love letter to God and it should stay in its current state..sincere and true from your heart. i bet it is equal to the best or poetry form literary giants in God's eyes and heart. It is probably better in His eyes. Good work. God bless you as you speak of your faith and love for God and share your conviction to the world.
2007-04-01 12:47:15 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
A beautiful poem. Keep writing. David wrote the Psalms you know.
2007-04-01 19:49:19 · answer #2 · answered by Jeancommunicates 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful!
2007-04-01 19:54:15 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Definitely sounds sincere, but, as poetry, it is a yawner.... hate to be a Grinch, a Simon Cowel, but I'd give it a 4/10 as poetry.....
it contains believable thought and heart, but it lacks artistic expression... lacks the unusual angle, the unique phrasing, to make it grab the reader....
2007-04-01 19:50:22 · answer #4 · answered by waynebudd 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Well personally I think it's really good and yes to a great extent all true I'm a born-again Christian for over 20 years so I would know I think
2007-04-01 19:42:35 · answer #5 · answered by kathmrc 3 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Sweet
2007-04-01 19:42:27 · answer #6 · answered by gwhiz1052 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
I think it wasa really nice poem. Good for you@ Have agood day and God Bless ya! I just wish I had of thought of it.
2007-04-01 19:44:25 · answer #7 · answered by SecretUser 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I love your poem. It's so true. Jesus really does love each of us and is always there for us. He's our best friend
2007-04-01 19:49:53 · answer #8 · answered by older mom 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I am sure your devotion is pleasing to God. It is not so much a poem as a prayer. Thank you for sharing it with us.
2007-04-01 19:46:23 · answer #9 · answered by Amalthea 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Thank you so very much for such a wonderful poem! It really affected me it is written so well. Would like to copy it?
2007-04-01 19:42:51 · answer #10 · answered by bobbie 2 · 6⤊ 0⤋