Tell you what you think of this poem I wrote. Be honest and tell me if it sucks.
Tree…
We need you to breathe in order to live.
Our environment needs you to survive.
You provide us, animals, and plants with shelter.
The climate is protected by you.
You absorb water and reduce flooding.
You provide us with beautiful scenery,
And so much more,
And yet we still cut you down.
Forests of you are burned,
For our own selfish reasons.
We do not realize that animals’ homes are being destroyed,
Or that this increases global warming.
We are making it harder to breathe by the destruction of you.
This could lead to the killing of us,
The human race,
Because of the destruction of you.
Some of us want to save you,
Though we are powerless to the ones in control.
All we hear is crash, smash of you and your family.
As we say bye to you,
We say bye to ourselves.
2007-03-30 08:16:19 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Environment ➔ Global Warming
Anjali
2014-11-18 14:13:16 · update #1
wow that is really powerful you can definitely tell how you are feeling in this poem and that's what a good poem writer does, you can definitely sense the emotion and seriousness of this poem. it is captivating and very sincere!!! Good job!!!
2007-03-30 08:24:36 · answer #1 · answered by Bubble S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's all right, but honestly doesn't flow all that well. Everything is said very literally; it's not poetic, as we usually like our poems to be. It's a good message, and said well, but when you read it it doesn't quite come across as a poem.
2007-03-30 15:42:37 · answer #2 · answered by Hotaru 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems more like a book report than a poem! But rather interesting!
2007-03-30 15:24:42 · answer #3 · answered by Theresa J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a very nice poem about nature and the outcomes. I think it's very interesting. Keep up the good work !
2007-03-30 15:30:45 · answer #4 · answered by Jayla32 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It isn't poetry -- it is prose.
While we no longer require poetry to have a rhyme scheme, we do require it to have a meter. this has none.
Besides, Joyce Kilmer was wrong, there are things more beautiful than a tree.
2007-03-30 15:25:10 · answer #5 · answered by Ranto 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. I would work on having it flow a bit nicer though.
2007-03-30 15:20:19 · answer #6 · answered by xoxodolphin 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The content is excellent,but the way it is presented is too plain.You need to use metaphors to make it seem more interesting.Good luck,and thanks for sharing.
2007-03-30 15:37:27 · answer #7 · answered by Student 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
BORING!
2007-03-30 15:19:49 · answer #8 · answered by soapscumninja 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋