I hear you speaking to me
when the nights is still
and shadows have been placed with a bright white light
that dances across my window
I cant see you
but I know you are with me
I smell your perfume
and I feel you pulling me up
when Im feeling down
I know Im on the right path
and I know that you are walking beside me
pushing me along every step of the way
never letting me give in to shadows
that reach out to grab me at night
then try to smoother me
with your sadness..
2007-03-28 08:47:47 · 10 answers · asked by G?ld?n ang?l 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I would give u a 10 out of 10. U hav talent and it is deep I think u should write more because u could probably get them published in a poem book if there as good as this one
2007-03-28 11:53:55 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
A few spelling mistakes which would make it an 8.5 like in to= INTO...and smoother= Smother Im= I'm..but when you fix that it's a 10!!!!
2007-03-28 20:36:10 · answer #2 · answered by Future Mrs. Hamlet 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
waaaaaaaaw
10 from 10 and star from me to u
i really like it , its amazing
she is very smart girl she feel him even she cant see him , so sweet
and he allways make her smile when she is sad
how sweet guy
he is giving her the hope all the time that is why she keep going with him lol i love both of them , cute couples *blushes*
2007-03-28 16:03:17 · answer #3 · answered by micho 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
um. 8 out of 10 ! can i have 10 points now? :P
2007-03-28 18:36:31 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
honestly 7 out of ten ,because it had very good emotion
2007-03-28 15:50:58 · answer #5 · answered by KING 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I thought it was great til the last sentence. "Your sadness"?
I don't get it....Sorry, maybe you can explain
2007-03-28 15:53:11 · answer #6 · answered by whaleaway 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I treasure how you'r mind works.
2007-03-29 10:51:36 · answer #7 · answered by $tevex 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
are these music lyrics.. the poem is depressing
2007-03-28 16:27:24 · answer #8 · answered by STORMY K 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Its beautiful...... Keep writing!!! You have talent!!
2007-03-28 15:53:43 · answer #9 · answered by nikkijean7072 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
pretty nice....
2007-03-28 16:19:00 · answer #10 · answered by fox mulder 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋