yeah it is getting annoying huh? last one!
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This world has just been a lot,
I'm weakened by the fact.
that it will be much too long.
before i'm coming back.
yes you read what i have to say,
you still can hear my voice.
yet how can that be sacred.
when there's also that static noise?
I've learned enough from the world,
there is but one thing I lack.
It's your calming presence with me,
how I wish I can go back.
There's nothing left to do now,
not a place I need to roam.
So chin up coz I'm coming back,
Baby, I'm coming back home.
2007-03-28 04:13:57 · 5 answers · asked by <Xariel the Stray> 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
pimpster? add me on IM or email me. lol i can make you one if u want.. cheval_steel@yahoo
2007-03-28 04:15:41 · update #1
Sad throughout, but leaves you with a good feeling at the end.....
2007-03-28 11:37:52 · answer #1 · answered by Jasmine Lily 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems are meant to be the barenaked expression of an emotion. If it doesnt turn out that way its just like any piece of writing. If you want an honest opinion, it lacked that 'expression'.
Thats not to say you should be cheesy, but you gotta hit the purest form of what you mean.
2007-03-28 11:19:07 · answer #2 · answered by Dabidu 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really good. Deep, dark, sad...could be seen as a love poem
...or a suic...wait don't want to get banned a good bye note...
should I be worried? I know poets take such liberties.
2007-03-28 12:05:13 · answer #3 · answered by sistermarybella 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I like this one too!!! And no its not annoying!!! Did u check my most recent on out, i just posted it read!!! ok ill add you as soon as i can ok!! Yea write me one id like that!!! taht would be cool!!!
2007-03-28 11:18:41 · answer #4 · answered by JessieRae07 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg, im gonna cry that was so beautiful awwwwww
2007-03-28 11:26:38 · answer #5 · answered by sweethyedreamer213 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋