ok tell me what you think about my poem!!!! PLZ?

Question

CHEATED

You made me feel broken& confused about the reason that you cheated after all that I gave.

I gave you everything that i possible could without giving up my life.

How could you do this with thinking it would make me cry or make me fell ashamed.

You said you didnt mean to and that it was a stupid mistake on yours and hers part.

Well, i can tell you that i agree with the whole stupid mistake part, b/c it was a stupid mistake but only upon your part.

It was the biggest mistake you had ever made and that was that you broke my heart.

Because you screwed yourself and you now youve lost me.

lost my love and belief in you.

You'll never find someone who loves you as much i Loved everything about you(until now)

Told you it was your mistake and not hers or mine.

Well, now its your loss and my most definate gain.

Answer 1

Cool poem.. but its so sad.. come on cheer up.. you'll find someone better and will treat you right.. and yeah, your right about its his fault and not yours or her.. his biggest mistake was breaking your heart..

Answer 2

it's not really a poem more like your true feelings on paper.

you have no stanza's and the structure is bad.

Content: he cheated plain and simple there's no such thing as it was a mistake.
Imagry: good it's nice to see a girl who knows what she gave and not be confused on what she did wrong (cuz apparently you didn't do anything wrong).

work on your structure your flow and i think this will be very nice. :D

Answer 3

poems need to have words used in an artsy way and at the same time expressing to the fullest a person's feelings. you have done expression. what about the use of words? you can do it.;)

Answer 4

this poem is actually pretty good. it really will make him feel that he made a big mistake and he will be ashamed

Answer 5

hmmmm.. well it sound find to me