hey guys, if you like it i can make one for ya too.n_n
Rain
Gray mist engulfs me,
in the silence of the sky.
Feelings are dreary,
As the world begins to cry.
Drops come and go,
washing away the world's pain,
and if all these things happen I'll know,
that the world will have begun to rain.
Rain down on the thirsty earth,
and bring the rocks back to life.
Return in drops, nature's worth,
And bring unto me heaven's rife.
Wet the dry and withered land,
drops which keep me sane.
I encounter nature's helping hand,
as the sky begins to rain.
2007-03-28 02:59:05 · 11 answers · asked by <Xariel the Stray> 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Belle, i guess there's a balance to it. the rain can make you dreary but the beauty of it keeps you sane in a way. there are lots of ways to look at rain. and yeah, 2nd stanza was weird. lol!
2007-03-28 03:09:15 · update #1
this is artistic writing, don't be too literal on the sane part and rife can also mean abundance.;)
2007-03-28 03:16:07 · update #2
I think it's beautiful. NOTHING is wrong with the second stanza at all. AND the contrast in the beginning and end gives it depth. It's doesn't all have to be peaches & rhyme and reason. As long as it means something to the writer.
And it sounds like it does.
2007-03-28 11:29:39 · answer #1 · answered by Jasmine Lily 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Personally, I'm not crazy about the wording in the second stanza. I also think, I said think, there is an agreement problem. In the beginning, it seem that the rain is making you "dreary", however in the end, it "keeps you sane"? This is a little confusing. Which is it?
2007-03-28 10:05:51 · answer #2 · answered by Belle 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love this poem. The earth is dry and dying and needs the rain to bring life back to it. Metaphor for us needing the Lord. We all feel dreary without the Lord, but the "rain", God, gives us back life. To make us "sane". I think it is a very deep and beautiful poem.
2007-03-28 10:26:17 · answer #3 · answered by bobbi 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Two words I don't go for: rife is an adjective meaning commonly occurring and sane doesn't really go except to rhyme with rain.
Wet the parched and withered land
Cool the fevers of my brain
I reach for nature's soothing hand
As blessed sky begins to rain.
2007-03-28 10:12:33 · answer #4 · answered by neologycycles 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is one of the best poems I have read in a while. You did a great job with it. The way I percieved the poem was that the mist and ( fog) had you depressed until the rain fell and clensed your heart. I think you should have it published. it is wonderful. On a scale of one to ten I'd give it a ten
2007-03-28 10:14:48 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow...seriously wow.
It is deep and beautiful. It brings up images of someone who has had their heart shattered but, is starting to bounce back. Letting themselves cry, letting themselves feel.
Iam impressed.
Got anymore?
2007-03-28 10:04:30 · answer #6 · answered by sistermarybella 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it because I can really feel the rain... inside
2007-03-28 10:02:00 · answer #7 · answered by atticus_loser03 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really nice
i like how it rhymes but doesnt use cheesy words
2007-03-28 10:03:01 · answer #8 · answered by ♥jonda♥sue♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it!!!!! ur a good writter
2007-03-28 10:02:58 · answer #9 · answered by JessieRae07 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i almost wanted to cry, it was gentle, humane, and kind.
2007-03-28 10:03:38 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋