inside
no light allowed
mirrors cast no reflections
candles cannot burn
the door is locked
and i
like a fool
knock...knock...knock...
only silence
i wait
day breaks
again..and again...and again
i cannot surrender
i will give...
but not give up
what is the key?
where is the key/
knock...knock...knock...
i have become a sentinel
to nothingness
i am aware of your darkness
can you believe in my light?
2007-03-27 12:10:58 · 2 answers · asked by patrick m 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
I would say its a five...you need to use more vivid words....paint a picture with your words. Dig deep within you and find your true feelings and go with it.
2007-03-27 12:56:10 · answer #1 · answered by candysdancingm_n_m 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would say a nine. Just a little punctuation needed and it would be best to change the slash. Either delete it or put it in the previous line.
2007-03-27 22:29:20 · answer #2 · answered by mfg 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋