have a little patience
take time with me
I am but an actor
in this improvesational play...that we call
life
and though sometimes I
miss my cue
fluff my lines
I am never the less...
a star*
as we all are
whose purpose it is
not to outshine one another...but...
to burn brightly
in one
universal
light...
2007-03-27 09:16:59 · 21 answers · asked by patrick m 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
WOW!! I like it i give you a 9.5!!!!!!!
2007-03-27 09:21:39 · answer #1 · answered by Toria 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9
2007-03-27 16:21:10 · answer #2 · answered by 2569457 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Touching-8
2007-03-27 16:22:11 · answer #3 · answered by Colette 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would say 7.5. It would be better if some of the lines were kept together and punctuated. Line 3 and the first half of 4 together, then the second part of 4 with 5. 6,7 and 8. It would feel like a better flow. Then I feel it would be a 9.
2007-03-27 22:43:58 · answer #4 · answered by mfg 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7 1/2. Just organize it differently, not so choppy, and it will be a definite 9 or 10! :)
2007-03-30 18:20:05 · answer #5 · answered by Moi 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'ld judge it as an 8.5! It is very well written and tells a true strory by the looks of it. Keep on writing! You have a lot of potential!
2007-03-27 16:22:10 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Normally a 4, however with improvisational spelled incorrectly, I must mark you down another 2 points.
2007-03-27 16:21:59 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
9 and a half its nice talks about life being like a stage and your the star. i have heard poems with that same concept before but i like this its well written.
2007-03-27 16:45:36 · answer #8 · answered by Suzzi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ITS A NICE 1 but i think u missed some thing
i know that u will give me a thumb down
but still i give six points to u
2007-03-27 16:26:44 · answer #9 · answered by Angad 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I give you a 10(!!) - mainly because you wrote it and sent it out here to be subjected who knows what.
2007-03-27 16:48:59 · answer #10 · answered by Mrs.M 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would give it a 7...it needs a little bit of work but is definitely interesting. i like it.
2007-03-27 16:20:41 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋