Poem I wrote just for the fun of it, what do you think?

Question

I'm artistic and a bit of a freak
But I fit in
In my own strange way
And people often wonder what planet I'm from

I'm offbeat and rare
I'm original and abnormal
And I live in my own world
But I'm happy this way

I'm colorful and bleak
Never one without the other
My split personalities go hand in hand
But I'm liked just the way I am

I hang out at starbucks
Though I don't drink coffee
I wear coats in the heat
Because my actions don't need reasons

People, if you don't have anything nice or productive to say, please don't open your piehole! As for the rest who've left nice comments, thank you.

Answer 1

(To people who are being rude, woww can't say any
of you are much better than wat 'cha say)

Okay I'll tell you exactly what I think!!
I'm guessing your still in school, right?
This seems something that would be enjoyable to read,
after all not every poem has to be so out of reach to
the point your like "what?".

So I think, if this if for a younger audience (18 and under)
they will be able to connect! While older people
would think it's cute and pretty well written,
at least in my opinion :].
But try not to keep the subject totally on you!!

I actually liked it~! Continue to make more!!

<3Xcstasy

Answer 2

It's good, but the prose seems a bit plain. Play with form and structure to emphasise what you are trying to say about yourself. Eg.

I'm artistic
And a bit of a freak(italicise). But I fit
In my own strange way

People often wonder what planet I'm from

I'm offbeat
rare

Answer 3

If that's your first pome... its good for a start. It is the work of an amateur, and you need to work on using better words and phrasing them differently. If you want to stick to verses of 4 lines, consider rhyming, or you can just make it one big verse, especially when you have the very small line "But I fit in"

Answer 4

mom launched into a matching theory years in the past. Sorry, yet adolescents does not constantly take excitement in or submit to in techniques. Yours, i'll objective. thank you for the good poetry and for stirring forgotten techniques. Edit: i've got been thinking approximately this and it tires me. even nevertheless your theory is powerful, I nevertheless choose interpreting poetry, and if perhaps it stirs my mind's eye, then i'll jot down my techniques. Sorry, it does not look that age has greater my appreciation. lol.

Answer 5

Ok for a small child audience, but not deep and artistic liek you say you are. You can do better i think. Reach deep within yourself. I bet you can come up with more in-depth words.

Answer 6

BOOO!!! Free verse blows.

I'll agree, not very deep, and you aren't quite unique. Most people are like you, sorry.

I love how you added more, hoping for better responses. Everyone is like this.
People are like snowflakes, we are all unique, but no one is truly special.

Answer 7

:D I love it! Its great. I like the flow and the idea and everything about it! Keep writing girl!
God bless you!
K.K.

Answer 8

your self centered, but im glad u like urself

Answer 9

i like it very much, it sounds like a modern song, it has good rhythm, i feel like dancing to its beat...

Answer 10

Pretty good, can't wait to read more.