Over time I felt that you were gradually feeling closer to me as we shared our past disappointments and fears.
2007-03-25 14:35:15 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
is disappointments and regrets the best words to use? This is regarding our past realtionships in that we have both been hurt and shared all that with one another. Also should Over time start the sentence and if not what other words would be gramatically correct to start the sentence?
2007-03-25 14:37:12 · update #1
Based on your explanation, I think the formulation you want is as follows:
"I felt that you were gradually feeling closer to me, as, over time, we shared our past disappointments and fears."
2007-03-25 14:44:12 · answer #1 · answered by Who Knew? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Over time, you were gradually feeling closer to me as we were sharing our past disappointments and fears.
1. I cut out the first part "I felt that", because the last part already states the subject.
2. I put a comma between time and you to make the the parts of the sentence.
3. I changed the verb "shared" to a verb with a helping verb "were sharing'.
The words disappointments and fears are approiate in this sentence.
2007-03-25 21:44:31 · answer #2 · answered by lulu 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You gradually felt closer to me over time the more we shared our past disappointment and fears.
2007-03-25 21:46:24 · answer #3 · answered by Kuji K 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I delete over time because you use gradually in your sentence, and they convey the same meaning in this sentence. As to disappointment or regret, ask yourself theses questions. Are you referring to something you wish you had done differently? Then use regret. Are you referring to things that have happened that were not what you wanted? Then, use disappointment. Hope this helps.
2007-03-25 21:49:24 · answer #4 · answered by topcat 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As time went by, I felt that you were gradually drawing closer to me as we shared our past ...
You know, this sounds personal, and I doubt the recipient is going to hold you to that high a standard of grammar. It's not like a teacher is going to be grading you. So your original way was adequate, in my opinion.
2007-03-26 02:18:39 · answer #5 · answered by californiadreamng 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think everything is fine. just u know add the commas and all. i think disappointments and regrets sound better then fears though.
2007-03-25 21:45:20 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you 'simplemiss' too? You want us all to write your love letters for you? Sheesh.
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2007-03-26 02:30:35 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋