what do u think of my story?

Question

Sometimes I just don’t know how we teens make it. From puberty to parents we all just want to die from embarrassment at times. Just like this moment when I was going on my first date. My mom was single and somehow always found a good reason to harass me. At the time I was 13, but I remember it like it was yesterday.



“Just let me grab the camera hun, real fast, I promise.”
“ Mom we have to leave… Now.” I screamed impatiently.

Now its not very often one gets a chance to go out with the school hottie. Like I said its not very often so to my dismay he wasn’t. But I got the next best thing, my best guy friend Matt. He wasn’t popular but he worked for me. He had shaggy brown hair, piercing blue eyes, and a smile that would melt any girl‘s heart. His idea of working out was going on IM but he wasn’t fat (just had some meat on his bones.\I mean who wants to date a skinny whip any way. The day he asked me out and I couldn’t have been more flattered. By the way, the names Danni,

Danielle for long. Let me take you back to that very moment.


“ Uh Danni.” Matt stuttered.
“Ya Matti what up.”
“Wanna hang this weekend?”
“Um sure what did you wanna do” I hesitantly replied.
“Maybe go to the movies…just…you…and me?” You could tell he was about to faint from embarrassment.
“Matt are you asking me out?”
“Uh I think so…” he pondered in his confused head.
“ Good how about Monsters Under the Bed at 7 o’clock ?”
“ Ya I’ll pick you up at 6:30 so we can get good seats and snacks.”
“ Sounds great..”
“ Sure does” He laughed.


this is the first chp of my new story... email me with feedback or if u want to see more

When I got home that day I told my mom about my plans. She was all excited saying “ my baby is growing up” and “ it sure will be lonely without you sure you don’t want me to come”. Anyways lets get back to the story.

“Just let me grab the camera hun, real fast, I promise.”
“ Mom we have to leave… Now.” I screamed impatiently

Answer 1

How sweet. I would like to know the rest. If you want to email me without the yahoo answers messages my email is [e-mail]

Answer 2

its pretty good but its kinda confusing how you keep on going back in time (your talking then you go back to the begging of the date and then you go when he asks you out) but it sounds like a good start. oh and the by the way the names danni kinda seems out of place. but work a little more on it and it could be really good! message me if you want! good luck!
ps dont listen to xdarkcloudhowlx you didnt ask about opinions on the world situation so i dont know why shes telling you hers but dont listen yo her

Answer 3

Sounds like a normal story of a boy asking a girl out. Good luck, Danni.

Answer 4

Interesting !

make this new mean skank move into town and she tries to steal matt as her boyfriend

Answer 5

No please don't. Wow you teens have it so hard in this world, you suffer so much, you guys suffer the worst out of anyone in this world, even people that starve (and don't know what food they will have for the next day and that's what they have to worry about) or children that live with STD's, or people that suffer from disasters in Asia, yep I would have to say you teenagers have it the worst.


Go do something in your life and stop complaining.

Answer 6

this is great. sounds just like one of the books i would read! you have a really good start to this! keep it up! =]

Answer 7

It is cool it is something me and my daughter would watch!

Answer 8

I love it, well written, but give a description of yourself so we can visualize who you are.