Me
and
my girls
went out
to get a burrito
when this
rude
cash register lady
was like
what can
I get you?!
I was like nah uh
you better
watch your tone
don you go
bitching about
your job
and spitting
in my food
she was
like
por favor chica
I was like
what the hell?!
whatever
I just got my
burrito
and
left
2007-03-25 10:56:55 · 11 answers · asked by ibid 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
This poem is creative. It deserves a Pulitizer LOL
2007-03-25 11:06:56 · update #1
Enjoy prison life, you'll make a nice girlfriend for someone.
Give out what you want , you want nice be nice !
Aren't you the better person ?
2007-03-25 11:19:00 · answer #1 · answered by Dalewolf aka nicksfan052648 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is...intresting. On a scale of one to ten, personaly I'd give it about a five or six. Mainly becuase of the word choice and how it was choppy. I found it intresting how you used ?! twice and both times for emphasis. the only two times you used puncuation too.
I wish you luck on your next few poems
God bless you
K.K.
2007-03-25 18:21:15 · answer #2 · answered by Kurious_Kat 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Chica...don't write anymore poems, por favor. This one lacks a great deal.
2007-03-25 18:00:58 · answer #3 · answered by Dee 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
All you did was take sentences and write them vertically. There is no sense of poetry there whatsoever. Pax - C.
2007-03-25 18:03:23 · answer #4 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Next time try mickey dees drivethrough -- you won't have
so much time on you hands or idle thoughts
2007-03-25 18:15:10 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You need to make personally like sometimes make them ryhm, but it doesn't make sense like this " The rain jiggles and Jaggles the roof as i sleep" that means It's pouring and it can be heard, a story like that will be... freaky???!!!
2007-03-25 18:00:25 · answer #6 · answered by SilverStream 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Is this supposed to be social commentary?
Whatever, it doesn't matter. I like it. It's original.
2007-03-25 19:48:29 · answer #7 · answered by avawho? 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's the worst poem i've ever read......and i've read some pretty bad ones on here.
peace
2007-03-25 18:05:48 · answer #8 · answered by Shadow Lark 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's awful.
2007-03-25 17:59:31 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
It's pretty good....not bad at all.
2007-03-25 18:00:23 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋