Do you like my poem or would you say its not some of my best work compared to my other poems?

Question

In order to read it and hear it the way I do, just keep reading it like its just one big sentence, don't stop at the end of the line just keep reading continuously. Rate 1 (being bad) too 10 (being great), comments welcomed, remember I wrote this kind of quickly, because I was bored, and I want to publish poerty and I don't think 10 poems can make up a book.

What is life?
Life is

Good and evil
Right and wrong
Dark and light
Black and white

Heaven and hell
Love and hate
Emotion and devotion
Deception and affection

Negative and positive
All which go
Hand in hand
One without the other would be incomplete

Life is
Full of opposites
That attract
And make a whole

Life is
A book…a treasure
Yet to be discovered
And the world is the golden library

Each person has their own
Books with bad grammar and mistakes
With chapters yet to be written
And errors yet to be fixed

Each with
A deeper meaning
Whom so many search for
But is rarely found

The book
Of life
Is reading
In between the lines

Its imperfection
That makes up perfection
It’s what you cannot see or feel
That makes life worth while

Changing like the seasons
Living for today
Because tomorrow is unknown
And has yet to come

The Book
Of life
Has secrets
With hidden truth

Only it knows
And has knowledge of
What Tomorrow
Will bring

As for Today is
in your HANDS
And only yours alone
Tomorrow being left for you to determine

Answer 1

I rate you a well deserved ten because your lines are short and simple and easy to understand. They show that you have a vast understanding of the world around you and of human thoughts, beyond what most of us can understand and observe. May the undeserved kindness of our Lord and his heavenly Father continue to bless you with fine words of encouragement for the lost sheep of this dark world....KECK

Answer 2

Eventhough the poem holds true thoughts, it's just that is presented in a shallow manner. If I were you, I would write another poem with this poem's core, make it more symbolic and I've always seen personification as a fantastic way to presenting poety. For instance, I wrote some kind of a poem at which I compare life to an old woman . I even compared it to a door. So, don't limit yourself with what's under your nose.
Look beyond

Answer 3

I would give it a 7. I like it, but personally I like poems that are little more out of the norm. I like poems that use words not normally found in everyday life. I like to be challenged a little more. But don't get me wrong. Yours is good. I like that you didn't use punctuations. I like the idea of reading it like "one long sentence". I would read it again and would even buy the book if you ever come out with one. Good luck on that!!!

Answer 4

I really like it

I guess I often assume I have some more control than I really do though.

I see life as trying to temporarily trying to control entropy.

we can choose to do things and effect life and what happenes or doesn't

or just wait and let things happen or not

or a combination of those

yeah, opposites making it whole

Answer 5

that poem is so true. i mean you really fit words into the right places...i especially love the heaven and hell part...because that is the most truest of all...you have to think of where you want to go...thanks for making a great poem! you are the greatest poet i ever knew

Answer 6

actually i really like them. the first i'd give a 7, the second a 6. i think you should experiment with longer lines. it takes more work, but poems with longer lines are more professional

Answer 7

I would give that a 10 out of 10! It was awesome!!!! I loved it! Good luck.

Answer 8

Wow! That is great! You have an obvious talent for poetry. And the poem is so true, too.

Answer 9

Wow! I like it!! Its great!! I would want to make a copie! lol just playing!

Answer 10

I would give this an eight!!