there is a bird in colifornia
there is not a bird in alabama
there is not a bird in florida
there is a bird in georgia
2007-03-25 00:52:09 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It is amusing...
You have some symmetry there by starting with "there is a bird..." and finishing with "there is a bird..." with "there is not a bird... " in the middle. It stresses the middle lines about no birds in Alabama and Florida. Makes me wonder why there isn't a single bird in Alabama and Florida. Is it because of pollution? Or some other reason?
On top of that, the rhyming of California matches that of Georgia, whilst the rhyming of Alabama matches that of Florida.
It is a nice simple poem which makes one ponder why there aren't birds in Alabama and Florida, and perhaps consider what are the issues there that resulted in no birds and possibly less wild life in general.
2007-03-25 02:38:17 · answer #1 · answered by Lilliana 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
First off, your question should be "Is this a good Poem". Secondly, the way your poem stands now, it sucks. This could a decent poem if you put the effort into improving it. By the way, copyright your work when you post it.
2007-03-25 11:10:34 · answer #2 · answered by angelpoet 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
=o ya..You could improve that because all you're saying is that there's a bird in states..no real point to it! BUT! It could become a masterpiece if you tried! ;D
2007-03-25 07:56:02 · answer #3 · answered by yukilover101 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
No. I don't think it's good poetry. DUH! There's a bird in every place in the world! You must be more creative. It would be much better if you listed what KIND of bird it was.
2007-03-25 08:05:31 · answer #4 · answered by Jocelyn 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice poetry.
2007-03-25 08:09:46 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like to know the story behind the poem before I decide. Currently, it is... interesting, but I don't understand it.
2007-03-25 13:43:41 · answer #6 · answered by Yuka 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
This is the word for it : laconic.
I like it after all. Little but nice.
2007-03-25 07:58:21 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I'd name it 'Ode to Schwarzenegger and Carter'
Let me add, there's something cool about it, because it reminds me of binary language -- open, closed, open, closed, closed, closed, open, open, closed, etc. (101001010110)
2007-03-25 07:57:11 · answer #8 · answered by Winston Smith 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I do not like it so bye bye birdy.
2007-03-25 07:56:10 · answer #9 · answered by burning brightly 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
well..you can improve it... *_*
2007-03-25 07:54:26 · answer #10 · answered by Pauli :) 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋