What i call love!
I want u to look at me
& tell me how much u care,
i want u to wipe tears from my eyes
& reassure me that u'll always be there.
I want u to hold me close
When it's far too cold at night,
i want u to hold my hand
when i sometimes get a fright.
i want u to love me
& accept me for who i am,
& if u can't do that
then ur not my kinda man.
I want ur eyes to light up
when i walk into ur sight,
i want us to be happy
& i never wanna fight.
i want u to want me too
coz i love u so much it hurts,
i want u to love me the same
not just let it be words.
i want to lay in the sand with u
& gaze at the stars above,
i want to be able to call u all mine
Coz babe - That's what i call love!
You don't have to like it just let me know what u think!!
2007-03-24 18:33:04 · 21 answers · asked by stevieglenwright 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Yes, i did write it! thanks to the people that do like it n the people that think im selfish n crazy... thanks, too!
2007-03-24 18:54:40 · update #1
this poem got deeps feelings just u reading it gives u passion i liked it alot
2007-03-24 18:39:45 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
You should name it : Before the divorce
I mean really we all feel like that and then we hate them and get divorced. Or name it Stalker 1 Have you looked how many i's are in this. Do you really think a guy feels that if he did he would sound gay I don't know how I feel about that it sounds all about you, but then you did start out with what I call love it sounds like a selfish love cause all you talked about was what YOU wanted. It scared me he would have to wipe tears away is that painful? Is this about someone or madeup?
2007-03-25 01:47:46 · answer #2 · answered by Luv2no is in the house 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Actually, I really do like it. You are very good at writing poems. This sounds like it came right from your heart and really touched me. I agree with the poem as well. I especially liked the part I want ur eyes to light up when i walk into ur sight, i want us to be happy & i never wanna fight. That part was probablly my favorite. Great Job! :)
2007-03-25 01:39:34 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's not my kind of thing, however it sounds pretty good.
I assume you'd expand the abbreviated words like:
u and ur and coz
however.
2007-03-25 01:37:28 · answer #4 · answered by LD 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I LOVE IT !!!!!!!! IF YOU WROTE THAT THEN YOU CAN BECOME A POET. IT IS SERIOUSLY ONE OF THE MOST BEAUTIFUL POEMS I HAVE EVER READ. IT IS PERSONAL, EMOTIONAL AND IT SOUNDS LIKE YOU ARE WRITING FROM THE HEART.
2007-03-25 01:46:21 · answer #5 · answered by AC 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really, really like it ! I think it tells it like it is ! And that's the way it should be! Your very good, at least with this poem- I am impressed!!
2007-03-25 01:38:54 · answer #6 · answered by buffster06 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
awwwwwwwww thats soooo sweet did you think of that yourself? is it for your crush / 'boy'?? coz if not u should give it to them!!! awesome eva if it was an assignment you get an A+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ hope i helped!
2007-03-25 01:38:22 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's pretty good. :)
Keep up the great work. My daughter writes poetry too.
2007-03-25 01:37:01 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good. I think it would be better as a song. Keep writing!
2007-03-25 01:38:18 · answer #9 · answered by Charley 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
THE FIFTH VERSION DOES NOT RHYME,AND I THINK YOU SHOULD CHANGE THE TITLE BECAUSE IN THE POEM IT SOUNDS MORE LIKE BEGGING THAN LOVE,SORRY IF THIS OFFENDS YOU.
2007-03-25 01:40:02 · answer #10 · answered by roll tide 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋