What do you think of this poem?

Question

I posted it before on Y/A, and changed it a little. If it sucks, let me know, if it's good, then tell me.

Oh, I am 24, but I love Van Morrison and Eric Clapton, which helped me write this.

Hope you like it,

Thanks for reading.



Moon Dance

Walking you down the stairs,
Everyone turns,
You smile, and they stare
A beautiful lady walking with me,
Looking at you I smile,
Your dress dances to the music,
I am taken away by you.

Walking two steps in front,
I take your hand to dance,
You smile as I touch,
The stars twinkle above your eyes,
Your love I can not get enough,
Clapton and Morrison are played,
But I never tire of dancing,

I put my hand on your hips as you sway,
I see the love in your eyes,
And I know how you feel,
The perfect night with romancing,
Your love and grace combined,
Leaves me feeling weak,
You ask me how I feel,
I feel wonderful because of you.

Answer 1

awww I love it.. it describes a guy who is clearly infatuated or hopefully in true love. Keep up the great work!!!! <3

Answer 2

ehhh it's ok but not very original

Answer 3

i likeit