Ok this poem I actually was thinking. It about how hard it is to find the special one and the feelings behind it all. This probably took me at least 10 minutes to think about for awhile. Click my pic. to see my other poems in questions. I am told as talented. What do you think?
"The special one"
Who is that special one?
The one that gives me trust,
true love, not lust?
Must I wait for him sitting in the park,
Waiting until dark,
waiting for our hearts to spark?
Who is that special one?
The one that holds me in his hands,
the one who cuddles me up,
Running his fingers through my hair strand by strands.
Why is hard to find the special one?
The world is so huge,
but there is no safety,
we both must take refuge.
Confusion in my brain,
Kissing in the rain,
what a perfect dream,
We work a perfect team.
We take what's left,
undone what must be done,
I finally take the beautiful turn,
I have found the special one.
-katekitty, 13
2007-03-24 06:20:54 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
When I mean -katekitty, 13 at the end I mean I am 13 years old. ^^
2007-03-24 06:24:56 · update #1
Well I don't know what the perfect one or special one is, but I have a pretty good idea of who I want my special person to be like. =)
2007-03-24 06:28:36 · update #2
Great job. Keep it up! The world needs strong, smart and creative girls. This is also a great way to express your feelings. I started writing poems when I was about your age and it is really fun to look back on them now.
2007-03-24 06:25:44 · answer #1 · answered by Robyn T 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful continue with writing poems one day u may become a song writer for music stars/celebrity. U r talented don't let your words and poems go 2 waste read them 2 everyone u just might inspire r make someone day.Take your time finding luv u r still young.
2007-03-24 13:31:43 · answer #2 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow that was good. you are good at what you do and you should keep writting, and telling how you feel on a paper is the best thing to do. just kep doing what you do and who knows maybe you could become someone very famous, just because you write.
2007-03-24 14:05:56 · answer #3 · answered by victoria_aguilar2002 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its pretty good, but its very old material
be creative!!!!
everyone writes about "the perfect one" in this verse
and what would you know about the "perfect one"? your only 13!
2007-03-24 13:27:40 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok....
i really liked the last stanza.
lol.
keep writing.
and for the second to last standza, instead of saying "work" say "make".
good luck!
2007-03-24 13:26:11 · answer #5 · answered by -:-vInTaGe PaSsIon-:- 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it shows lots of promise. keep going
2007-03-24 13:26:04 · answer #6 · answered by bubbly 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's really nice
2007-03-24 13:28:53 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋