At school I have to write a fictional story about 2 charectors. Tell me if you like this Summary or Idea.....
Okay, so this girl Nora moves in and her dad is in the navy. There is no playgrounds around because the town is poor. The kids have nothing to play with so they play in this tree at this abandon house. Nora moves into this abandon house and her family fixes it up and cuts down the tree. All the kids hate Nora because she cut down their only fun. One day, Nora asks someone why everyone hates her because she still doesn't know. This girl Kasey tells her and she is really upset. The next week a girl named Erica moves in & Nora thinks it's another person to hate her but then she realizes that Erica doesn't know about the tree. They become best friends and live happily ever after. So that's my story.... Do you think there could be any changes and do you like the Idea? Hey it's fictional! I also need a title. Please Help! It's due tomorrow!
2007-03-22 12:52:55 · 10 answers · asked by Nikki m 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Family
I actually really like that idea ^.^
That would make a very good story...I cant think of a title though...sorry =(
2007-03-22 12:57:19 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If it were my story I'd have the house be old but it was not lived in because there aren't many people moving to this neighborhood.
What do Nora and Erica do for fun? This town sounds unusually boring...what's up with that? Maybe you could have parks and other places where older/younger kids play like it was only the kids in Nora's grade that hate her for getting rid of the tree.
Also, you should give her family a good reason for getting rid of this tree. The branches could be hanging dangerously over the house, maybe one even fell. Sometimes the roots break the basement walls and foundations too. Just give them a good reason so that Nora's family isn't totally wrong (but she doesn't get a chance to explain/they don't understand).
Again, if it were my story, I'd have Nora and Erica come up with a fun idea. Maybe they build a tree house in the nearby timber and the other kids come around and apologize.
2007-03-22 20:05:53 · answer #2 · answered by kgconcerned 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nora needs to solve the playground problem. Perhaps her father gathers some of his shipmates and they create a playground on an abandoned lot. The first part of your story is good the second is weak. If she solves the crisis she becomes a heroine if not it's just a total wash. The thing about fiction there is always a problem a fix and then possibly another problem and another fix. Perhaps the other new girl in town is a sailor's daughter too perhaps they are both outcast and they go to their fathers and fix the problem. Then suddenly they are the two most popular little girls in town. Win win and they have each other for best friends forever. Good luck with your story would love to read the finished product.
2007-03-22 20:00:27 · answer #3 · answered by QueenBean 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that you could drive home the point of it not mattering about where you live because it appears as though Erica likes her because she does not know about the tree, how about Erica liking her because of who she is whether the tree was cut down or not. Also how about when Noras Dad comes home from the Navy and sees how miserable Nora has been that he builds a tree house for Nora and the neighborhood kids.Hope you do great on your story. The title could be called The Treehouse
2007-03-22 20:03:32 · answer #4 · answered by myleshunt 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like the beginnings of a good plot. Might want to flesh out the fun things that the kids do with this tree. Make it more sentimental. Maybe somebody got their first kiss at the base of it. Maybe so and so carved so and so's initials on it.
Somebody fell off and got a broken arm/leg.
Then develop a summary about the things these kids do to Nora. Other than just 'hate' her, what do they do to her, specifically?
Titles? Hmm....
"The Friendship Tree"
"Nora's Moving Day"
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Hope this helps...
2007-03-22 20:03:38 · answer #5 · answered by CyberCop 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, but i think that you need to resolve at least partly the conflict with the rest of the town. title? The Gathering Place
2007-03-22 19:57:00 · answer #6 · answered by lea 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great story...uh a title could b...losing a tree,gaining a friend?
2007-03-22 22:47:44 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Luv it, you clearly have a creative edge.
2007-03-22 19:57:40 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it!!!!!!!!!
2007-03-22 19:55:42 · answer #9 · answered by komical 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awesome!!!!!!!!!
2007-03-22 19:57:41 · answer #10 · answered by Get Over It 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋