this song I wrote
it goes like this
I've seen from Heaven
how The Silence has
raise a voice of suffering
waiting for the moment to say
to say
I'm not crying not because I want
without a doubt, I'm dying
If I don't feel Your hand beside me
I can't go on.
I can't go on
but when I see The sky above
i see your face and between your lips
a voice that says you love me!
you love me.
2007-03-22 07:55:02 · 9 answers · asked by Not Of This World 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
thanks miss - you'll see me with a grammy
2007-03-22 08:01:24 · update #1
kelli thanks for the advice. I wrote the song in spanish I just translated the song!! i need to work on the english Version
2007-03-22 08:03:32 · update #2
it sounds lovely : )
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2007-03-22 07:58:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Short song. Possibly would never win a grammy for best religous song of the year. Okay. Keep trying. Doesn't do much for me since I'm not a fan of Christain music. I'd have to hear it with music to get excited over it.
2007-03-22 15:00:01 · answer #2 · answered by missgigglebunny 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't really understand the first part. And some of it does not follow normal grammatical rules. You might want to think a little more about your message. What are you trying to say?
Check your grammar, and work on the first part. Other than that you are on the right track.
2007-03-22 15:01:05 · answer #3 · answered by Kelli 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm....not so sure! You've got a good sense but it's all over the place. Maybe if you try to order it, obviously add the music and maybe make a bit more subtle.
Then again what do i know?!
2007-03-22 15:01:38 · answer #4 · answered by Phantom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Could be longer and it depends on what music you put with it. Like it except for it being so short.
2007-03-22 15:00:43 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If it has music, it could be the perfect background for a lurid porno flick!
2007-03-22 14:58:49 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I dont' listen to music...I have no opinion on this particular subject...thank you...
2007-03-22 15:00:05 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
put it to a dance beat, and its bangin! HOTT
2007-03-22 14:58:02 · answer #8 · answered by idugh 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's terrible.
2007-03-22 14:58:55 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋