baby please
try to understand
you may not be perfect
but you'll always be my man
you don't need to try
you've already impressed me
baby, you're my future
you're the only one i see
you give me that kiss
that makes my fear go away
you deep in my heart
and you'll always stay
don't fear love
don't fear pain
i'm not going anywhere
we have so much to gain
you treat me like a goddess
but i'm as real as you
i love everything
even the little things you do
i don't need jewelry
flowers, or clothes
i'm overwelmed with that little kiss
you give me on my nose
baby, don't worry
i'm not gonna run
now sit back, enjoy love
and let's have a little fun
2007-03-21 08:09:33 · 25 answers · asked by Back*To*Me 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
umm doesn't sound peom..to me
its more as a letter.
2007-03-21 08:14:24 · answer #1 · answered by G?ld?n ang?l 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋
The poem is great, but the structure of it could use some work. Putting it into stanzas will give it a more fluid feel. Obviously you might want it to seem longer...or possibly when you copy + pasted, it came out wrong. But this is what I would do to make it easier to read:
"Title?"
baby please, try to understand
you may not be perfect, but you'll always be my man
you don't need to try, you've already impressed me
baby, you're my future, you're the only one i see
you give me that kiss, that makes my fear go away
you deep in my heart, and you'll always stay
don't fear love, don't fear pain
i'm not going anywhere, we have so much to gain
you treat me like a goddess, but i'm as real as you
i love everything, even the little things you do
i don't need jewelry, flowers, or clothes
i'm overwelmed with that little kiss -
you give me on my nose, baby, don't worry
i'm not gonna run, now sit back, enjoy love
and let's. . .
have a little fun.
2007-03-21 08:16:19 · answer #2 · answered by that_guy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice. Non-traditional which adds to the uniqueness. Very good. A+
2007-03-21 08:12:40 · answer #3 · answered by xanthostaos 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
do no longer concern i've got referred to as people on the incorrect msn chat in the previous, basically clarify what you have been meant to assert and apologies. i'm specific he would be advantageous with it, if he is going out with you.
2016-10-02 12:45:06 · answer #4 · answered by derverger 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love poetry and there have not been one poem that i did not like in some way. this being said i like your poem it states how your bf makes you feel and how you want to be with him.
i write poetry sometimes and the poetry to a loved is so sweet. it shows how much you care about them.
2007-03-21 08:14:49 · answer #5 · answered by Blessed and Happy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It doesent realy flow so try to read it again and go over what you can mack flow it is good just try that
2007-03-21 08:14:10 · answer #6 · answered by jugillet chick 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you have away w/ words. you go girl. once that poem is from u ur BF.will surely love it. continue writing you've got a magic touch. : )
2007-03-21 08:19:07 · answer #7 · answered by Lexie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful! Also, it sounds as if its from your heart and anything written or stated from your heart, can only be beautiful.
2007-03-21 08:12:58 · answer #8 · answered by ann c 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty Good you've said it all, Nice job.
2007-03-21 08:41:52 · answer #9 · answered by DickeyDee 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats really good! I like to write poems also and its great that you like to write them to your boyfriend! he should write them to you though!
2007-03-21 08:13:20 · answer #10 · answered by Red 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wondeful. Is it not wonderful to think of others and give them kindness....Excellent.. He will love it.
2007-03-21 08:14:12 · answer #11 · answered by commonsense2265 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋