One Poem "Nonexiestent Love" ... Constructive Criticism?

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One Poem "Nonexiestent Love" ... Constructive Criticism?

sweet nothing
sweet pain

so much rain

untouchable
but lovable

nothing more
to gain

in the end

everything's
dead

and there is

nothing

sweet
nothing

2007-03-21 07:41:52 · 3 answers · asked by Kasandras 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating

3 answers

Good one.Sensual.

2007-03-21 07:58:00 · answer #1 · answered by Sheeth 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋

That's probably the best poem I've seen posted here. Nice work.

2007-03-21 17:55:52 · answer #2 · answered by Rio Madeira 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋

Ouch.. unrequited love is indeed painful. Nice poem. Change the spelling to "Non-EXISTENT" though.

Good luck!

2007-03-21 14:48:07 · answer #3 · answered by Luzzie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋