Take me Home
She wants a salvation
Down that road to the celebration
She wants a real salvation
Escape from persecution
In that imperilled, perishing nation
She sings, come and take me home
come and take me home
Like the slaves of Rome
come and take me home
I have nowhere to roam
come and take me home
come and take me home
Heal my bleeding hands and broken bones
She wants those windswept streets
And the holy sites and city beats
She wants a salvation
Some uplifting of the spirit
A return instead of pilgrimage
She sings, come and take me home
come and take me home
Like the slaves of Rome
come and take me home
I have nowhere to roam
come and take me home
come and take me home
take me
2007-03-20 21:57:53 · 2 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
double awesome
2007-03-20 22:03:40 · answer #1 · answered by helly 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The rhymes seem pretty repetitive. What kind of music are you thinking of for it?
In one verse you have home on 5 lines out of 8, 2 of the remaining lines are direct rhymes and the remaining line is very similar sounding
Your first and final verses have the same problem.
Personally I would find it a bit much.
I have a hard time with the meter too.
Sorry to be saying it. It needs work.
On the positive, I like the images you are trying to present. Suffering and salvation dreams are classics. They work very well but need careful handling not to become cliche.
2007-03-20 22:11:54 · answer #2 · answered by U-98 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋