Invitation wording?

Question

Can I get people's opinions on this wording? Any grammer errors or any suggestions are welcome! Thanks!

Together with our parents, we
Sandy Smith
and
John Black
ask you to join us for an intimate
ceremony to celebrate our Love
on Saturday, the eleventh of August
two thousand and seven
at ten-thirty in the morning
Location Name
Address
Town

Luncheon Reception
following the ceremony

Answer 1

It is absolutlely lovely just the way it is. Good luck and God bless

Answer 2

Together with our parents, we
Sandy Smith
and
John Black
ask you to join us for an intimate
ceremony to celebrate our Love
on Saturday, the Eleventh of August
Two Thousand and Seven
at Ten-Thirty in the morning.
Location Name
Address
Town

Luncheon Reception
following the ceremony.

There were some words that needed capitalization. Also is the Luncheon Reception at the same place as the Ceremony, if not you must state where it is being held. And if not everyone whom is invited to the Ceremony is invited to the reception then I wouldn't put it on the invitation, rather include a reception card in those invitations that are invited to the Reception. I would also put whether or not the Reception is being held directly after the Ceremony or if it is at another time. Hope this helps.
This is what we are putting on our invites, something a little different:

Love was meant to be shared with parents, family and friends
Because you have shared
in our lives, we
Miriam Elizabeth
and
Richard Joseph Peter
invite you to share
with us as we
exchange marriage vows
on Saturday, July 14 2007
at one o'clock
(place)

A cocktail reception
will follow at the
(place)

We did not include our last names, rather our middle names.

Answer 3

Only a few minor corrections (most invitations are written in the 3rd person when including parents):
The following would all be centered too, of course


Together with their parents

Sandy Smith (FULL name here)
and
John Black (FULL name here)

request your presence at an intimate
ceremony to celebrate their Love
on Saturday, the Eleventh of August
Two Thousand and Seven (you may choose to leave out the 'and' here)
at Ten-Thirty in the morning

Location Name
Address
City/Town, State

Luncheon Reception
following the ceremony
When? if immediate, say "Immediately following the ceremony", if later, include a time
Where? If same location this is fine, if another location you should type up a seperate reception card or include the address as:

Reception Location Name
Address
City/Town, State

Answer 4

I would take out the "we." You could put this line after your names (Sandy and John, together with our parents...). It's "two thousand seven", no "and." And always use middle names, it's more "proper." Also, I don't know if you purposely capitalized "Love" but it doesn't NEED to be (can be if you want it) When I did my invitations, I was told it's "Half past ten" not "ten thirty" but I think this is whatever you feel, as "half past" could be confusing... If you can, I would break the lines up like this:

Together with our parents
Sandy Marie Smith
and
John Michael Black
ask you to join us for
an intimate ceremony
to celebrate our love [Love?]
Saturday, the eleventh of August
Two thousand seven
at half past ten in the morning
Location
Address
Town

Luncheon Reception
following the ceremony



It sounds good, sorry I'm a grammar freak!

Answer 5

Agreed with who ever pointed it out above...Invitations are usually written in the third person, especially for a large wedding. Unless it is a very small, intimate ceremony, change the "Together with our parents" to "Together with their parents"

Together, with their parents,
Sandy Smith
and
John Black
ask you to join them for an intimate
ceremony to celebrate their love (celebrate their love, honor and commitment to one another)
on (Do not put the word "on" on the same line as the date...listing the date on it's very own allows it to pop out a little more...)
Saturday, the Eleventh day of August, Two Thousand and Seven
at
Ten-thirty in the morning.
Location Name
Address
Town

Luncheon Reception to follow
reception address here (OR if the reception is at the same location as the ceremony, you can simply state "Luncheon reception to immediately follow") and leave it at that.

Answer 6

Together with our parents, we
Sandy Smith
*** [Sandra Smith]
and
John Black
***[Jonathan Black]
***[together with our parents]

ask you to join us for an intimate
ceremony to celebrate our Love

***[request the pleasure of your presance as we celebrate our love]
on Saturday, the eleventh of August
two thousand and seven
at ten-thirty in the morning

Location Name
Address
Town

Luncheon Reception
following the ceremony
[This should be in much smaller font size than the rest of the body]

Answer 7

Emma Margaret Johnson
and Jack Warren Smith
together with their parents
invite you to join them
in celebrating their marriage
on Saturday, the sixth of June
two thousand and nine
at five o'clock in the evening
St. Michael's Church
Orland Park, Illinois

I think it should be in third person ('they' invite you instead of 'we') (they = more formal BUT we = more casual and personal)- but choose what works best for the situation!

I think the wroding sounds great! good job

Answer 8

[parent's names]

invite you to witness the wedding of

Sandy Smith
and
John Black

on Saturday ...

(the rest is fine).

Tell them it's a wedding; don't be coy.

Good, heavens, with the word intimate, and "celebrate our Love" it sounds like you're inviting them to an orgy.

If you don't want your parents to "host" (even in name only, leave that part our and start with your own names).

The purpose of the invitation is to invite people to a particular event, and give the needed information, such as when and where.

You need to be clear and specific as to the nature of the event: it's a wedding ceremony (if it isn't, them call it whatever it is).

Being unique or otherwise coy is at best confusing, at worst, offensive.

If you're getting married, people will assume it's out of love.

Answer 9

I think it sounds fine. This is what we are using

With joyful hearts
We ask you to be present
At the ceremony uniting
(name one)
and
(name two)
on such and such a date
Two thousand and eight
at such and such time in the afternoon
(Location address here)

Mr and Mrs (bride mom and dad)

We are using recpetion to follow enclosure cards with the address on it since they are in two different locations. Looks funny on here but it is stunning on the invite.

Answer 10

O - skip the "intimate" first of all.
Better wording would be to have your names first, followed by "together with our parents".