what do you think of this which i wrote for my crush ...?

Question

well, it has been long time since i loved him (about 3 years). and i fed up with it
everytime i say i wanna leave him, i forgive myself and i rub my tears away, everytime i try to be honest with myself and tell the bad side of him but i admit that lied at myself, every time i see him i picture his smile and i keep seeing it in my dreams ... so finally, i'm going to do it and i'm going to send him this!
This is an invitation to
be with me, talk with me
walk with me, laugh with me
This is an invitation to
open your heart to me
to bare your soul, leaving nothing but the real self.
this is an invitation for
softness, tenderness
caring, Compassion
love...
A world where all your dreams can come true
A place where the fires burn down slowly
leaving a nice steady flame
would you like to join this world with me?____________________________
Traaaaa! Do you think this will work? because i know he loves me but he dont dare to tell me that, so i think this is the best way tell.

Answer 1

WOW! that sounds really beautiful but it sounds like something you would say at your wedding or proposal but regardless hey do your thing girl it was beautiful.

Answer 2

I enjoyed reading your poem and think that it is very creative and sweet...I think that if you really want to give it another shot and win him back, then this would be a really romantic way to take the risk and put yourself out there to him. Good luck to you and I hope he accepts your invitation :)

Answer 3

It's a poem -- the spelling and grammar are fine.
I think it's really sweet, actually. I think you'll get a good response!

Answer 4

you really need to work on your spelling and grammar....i didn't give the "poem" any attention because I couldn't get past the grammar.

Answer 5

Its really nice. Try it.