to get the best of rhymes used,
try different tunes, read each line separately,
then tell me if you get confused,
or don't end up in captivity.
i always complained about no holidays,
till i got two months holidays recently,
but turned out hell for me that phase,
i'll never do that complaint again, you'll for yourselves see.
i am so much fed up of lying all day long,
i am gonna try my best
to warn you about the misery, through this song,
upto you is all the rest.
you really never know what,
can make you fed up of this world,
now i do know the meaning of what to me was taught,
this life is twisted and curled.
not so easy is being at home so long
its worse than getting an amputate
i make you aware through this song
go do some work, you can yourselves decide your fate.
i never believed in predestiny,
i never believe in god,
whatever you do, don't do it silly,
your life should be like a mighty battle fought.
2007-03-18 20:59:08 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
after that all hue and mime,
and with a deep sigh,
till we ever meet next time,
i say to you GOODBYE.
2007-03-18 20:59:23 · update #1
be sure to read all my poems in my Q&A.
2007-03-18 20:59:50 · update #2
yes, i made this.
2007-03-19 06:50:41 · update #3
Another excellent poem from one of the greatest poets I have met in my life. Keep up the excellent work.
2007-03-19 01:33:49 · answer #1 · answered by Scippio of Light 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good one! It is a good way of spenting time by writing poem. It is said that poets who write poems have long life. The poets in our country live for 70-92 yrs.
And ur poem gives a natural feeling and it reminds me surely how to utilise time.
Any way it was really good and do try to make more better poems.
Good Luck!
2007-03-19 04:22:41 · answer #2 · answered by Sarah Koshy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should consider your consequence
as your poem hardly makes sense.
2007-03-22 13:07:40 · answer #3 · answered by Riz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
eeem...its okay, but lil things like use of the enflish language must be tightlyu within your grasp b4 you write poems...things like sentence structure...aaaanyways though, it wz pretty good!
2007-03-19 05:07:06 · answer #4 · answered by teDDie xx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked the 'originality' one better :)
Good way of passing time. V creative !
2007-03-19 04:07:27 · answer #5 · answered by Praxis 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Have we a budding poet in our midst?
2007-03-19 04:16:38 · answer #6 · answered by Baby Boo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'll give u 9.5/10
for this cos nothin's perfect
2007-03-19 04:14:56 · answer #7 · answered by Rockman 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
HEY I COPIED YOUR POEM COZ I NEEDED AN ORIGINAL POEM FOR MY ENGLISH PROJECT. THANKS BUDDY YOU MADE MY DAY
2007-03-25 12:28:19 · answer #8 · answered by Goosebump 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is nice, did you made this!!
2007-03-19 09:44:24 · answer #9 · answered by Pd 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋