Help with poem i wrote.?

Question

I wake up every morning
A first thought in mind
That thought is you
I’m so glad your mine
Waiting to see you
I know you love me too
Hopefully forever
One day after another
Just the sight of your face
Will make me smile
Making everything
Seem worthwhile
I can’t say everything
I wanted to say
But I’ll try to show you
Everyday
To know your there
I can’t compare
The feeling I get
I’ll never forget
The trust is strong
I know we belong
Today’s the day
I just wanted to say
I hope were always together
I love you so much Heather

thanks everyone so far, i pretty much just wanted to know how it was overall. im 16 yrs old. i wanted to write my girlfriend something meaningful for say easter coming up.

Like someone said the rhyming is confusing, can you help me fix this without redoing the whole thing.
thx

Answer 1

Honestly.....I think it's perfect exactly the way you wrote it!! She will love it, because it came from YOUR heart, and not from some stranger on Yahoo Answers. lol

She's very lucky to have you....

Answer 2

What do you want help with your poem? do you want us to improve on your poem to make it more romantic? Please include more information on what you are asking, thanks.


I love the last 2 sentences "I hope were always together, I love you so much heather." But make poems like if it's rhyming, make the whole thing rhyming, and if it's not, then don't.. But that's just expressing my opinion. Here I'll give you a star for at least trying and making a poem for your loved one! ♥

Answer 3

Lucky Heather!
Lovely. Have a star.

Answer 4

the ryming is very confusing. maybe make the poem without rymes and just really say what you think. after, maybe tell her its hard for you to write poetry but you really do love her and enjoy spending time with her and its hard to limit a poem to just stanzas and versuses and rymes when you have an infinite love for her.

Answer 5

cute!!