i am too tired sittin' home all day long,
so i thought of writin' a song.
this home alone being was eatin' me away
so i decided to write a poem today.
can u please a part of your attention lend,
and read it peacefully till the poem's end.
i know imperfect is all the punctuation
but it adds much to my original creation.
with a broken heart and a parted brain,
i express my feelings on this paper plain.
i just wish i had a foresight,
i am insane surely think you might.
u may wonder why am i shoutin' loud,
and what the heck is this fuss all about.
so get ready for the real lines four,
which i tell ya with a heart very sore.
" i wrote it all just to ask for your brotherly / sisterly affection,
to help me make this... this hard selection :
someone asked me to make a choice between one and two,
but i couldn't, so i simply asked you "
whether you liked it or not,
its all a matta' of taste
in the end, sorry is mine thought,
for all your time i waste.
feel free to provide the link to this page,
just to spread my creation around the net,
but please don't copy this poem without my credit share,
else i won't do anything, just with tears my face will get wet.
2007-03-18 01:18:19 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
thnx all, its my original. if you havent, you should also read my second poem.
2007-03-18 01:32:29 · update #1
whats an emo kid ???
2007-03-18 01:32:50 · update #2
i will post a new short one about originality which i have already written. so check my Q & A soon.
2007-03-18 07:43:37 · update #3
Thats some good deep $h!+ man!!!!!
2007-03-23 17:01:05 · answer #1 · answered by Just Mckale 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats good U r capable
2007-03-23 01:46:11 · answer #2 · answered by SIG 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is simply amazing. You should consider publishing your work on your own website or through a publisher.
2007-03-18 08:56:21 · answer #3 · answered by Scippio of Light 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Not to be rude,dude but you should kick back and relax!
2007-03-24 05:16:33 · answer #4 · answered by johnny n 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very goooood and quite enjoy reading it
2007-03-18 08:56:50 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
are u an emo kid or something? anyway, its pretty good.
2007-03-18 08:31:02 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
your poem is cute,
I like what you wrote
you're talent dude
This is my word :)
2007-03-18 08:27:44 · answer #7 · answered by woo 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
KEEP GOING DUDE!!!..awesome!
2007-03-19 06:11:03 · answer #8 · answered by --zEaLoUsMe-- 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
You lost me at:
u may wonder......
2007-03-18 08:25:33 · answer #9 · answered by Mrs. T 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow, it was really gooooooooooooooood.
2007-03-25 11:05:11 · answer #10 · answered by ana 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋