When I get a letter
To me its like Christmas night (I know its actually supposed to be eve but it rhymed)
Something new to discover
each letter with its own special delight
Too open a letter
To find that little joy each word holds
A present in itself
The little surprize within its folds
Its not finished thats all I could think of for now
2007-03-17 20:27:21 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
-I like the first stanza and it flows really well,
-the only problem I had was with the second part, I think that the second line is a bit too long. I think you should take out the "little" then the whole poem flows quite nicely.
-This is actually a pretty well written poem, keep up the good work =)
2007-03-17 20:37:58 · answer #1 · answered by Patrick B 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great start there! So much truth in the those first lines about taking the time to send a special note to a special someone. A rarity in this world of technology.
Good luck with your poem.
2007-03-17 20:37:36 · answer #2 · answered by Serpico 13 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your on a roll sounds good
2007-03-17 20:35:35 · answer #3 · answered by workit 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋