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Question

"california is the most linguistically diverse state in the nation... more than 120 languages are spoken here, from the obscure cadences of Hmong or Q'anjob' al to the more familar rythms of Korean, Russian, and Spanish. This combination creates language island that are increasingly a significant and permanent feature of the Southern California landscape"

-what would be a good thesis for this quote?
-what are the pros and cons of this quote?

please help. any help would be appreciated. i'm not good with writing in english, i just hope for some ideas. thanks in advance. by the way, i can only give 10 points to 1 person, if only one person reply, i'll give it to that person.

Answer 1

This quote is much to detailed to have or be a thesis. It is great for a supporting paragraph, but not in a thesis statement. In your thesis, you want to write a sentence which your entire paper will tie into. You don't want specific detail unless that can be expounded upon. Unless you are going to spend the entire paper talking about the 120 languages and how they create language islands, don't have this be your thesis.
It seems that your paper is going to be something along the lines of the diversity of California. Here is one partial idea which you can use (it may not be what you're looking for, though):
California is the most diverse state in the United States because: 1. It has more languages than any other state (this would need to be something which you could write at least an entire paragraph on, and so it may not be good unless you have a lot to say about that), 2. . . . and 3. . . .
You want to have each argument one where you can have at least a full paragraph (and often more depending on how long your paper will be) written in more detail on it. For instance, if reason 1 were something detailed and you said it all in your sentence, your thesis would be somewhat pointless, since it is basically there to give an overview of what you are going to write. Everything you write should tie into your thesis, too---no extra little details you really wanted to talk about (unless you can make an extra paragraph for them with a part which links to your thesis). If you would like some help with this, feel free to write me.

Regarding pros and cons:
Pros: more to draw from because you have so many cultures and ideas, etc.

Cons: It would be difficult to speak to, and possibly even relate to, everyone because of so many differing languages and cultures.

I hope this helps you some. Good luck on your paper!

Answer 2

Both culturally and linguistically, Southern California, where more than 120 different languages are spoken, is akin to an international assembly of nations. Each language represents a separate culture that produces a hegemony all its own. Only the public school system can bring such disparate peoples together. They need to find unification by means of the English language and the American culture to create a homogeneous society. Without this, they will exist much like an archipelago, separate islands unto themselves, which could prove unhealthy, if not dangerous, in a contentious political climate, where people fear what they don't know and can't understand.

Answer 3

I think I need to know the source of the quote before I could be of much help. It seems that the quote is not yours, but -- who wrote it or where did you find it? A newpaper article, a textbook?

Nonetheless, I think this is about the debate over whether or not it is feasible, ethical, reasonable, practical, moral, whatever...to make English the official or required language in the state of CA. ??

Answer 4

How immigration is changing the linguistic landscape (or linguistic map) of California....California is increasingly becoming a polyglotic(poly=many..glot=languages) state....Your quote is just fine and it addresses your topic very well.

Answer 5

!st the last sentence the verb "are" .Are you sure this is what you want to use.